Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of individuals in owned and rented residencies in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, Households in owned accommodation was increased throughout the period, while households in rented apartment was decreased, in contrast both in owned and in rented percentage of households were equivalent for few years.

In 1918, people in rented accommodation was around 75% and then declined to just below 70% in 1939 and same as in 1953. In rented households accommodation decreased to 50% in 1971 and then after four decades it reached to their lowest number of percentage which is just round 32%. In 2011, households in rented appartment rose to approximately 45%.

In 1918, households in owned accommodation was just over 20% which is lower than households in rented accommodation in the same year. Both in rented and in owned household residencies were level out in 1939 and 1953. In 2001, households in owned residencies climbed to just below 70% before dropped to around 65% in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main contrast and provide a clear overview: ownership generally rose while renting fell, and the two figures met at 50% in 1971. Several key stages are also reported accurately, including the rented share at about 68% in 1939 and 1953 and ownership reaching roughly 69% in 2001. This gives the response a solid account of the chart. However, the overview says ownership increased “throughout,” although it fell from 69% to 64% in 2011, and the rented figure for 2011 is given as about 45% rather than approximately 36%. The account also calls the 1991 rented share the lowest, without clearly distinguishing it from the lower 2001 value. Correcting these details and covering the late-period reversal more precisely would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs. The chronological sequence is generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “In 1918” and “In 2001” help locate the data. However, the organisation of the details is not fully efficient: the first detail paragraph focuses on renting, while the second returns to 1918 and then discusses ownership, so the reader has to move back and forth between years and series. Some linking is also awkward or unclear, particularly “In rented households accommodation decreased” and “Both in rented and in owned household residencies were level out.” Grouping the two series together by period, and using clearer comparisons such as “By contrast” or “At the same time,” would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “declined,” “climbed” and “approximately,” and you attempt to vary the language used to describe change. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision. “Individuals” is not the right unit when the chart reports households, and “owned and rented residencies” and “rented apartment” do not describe the categories naturally. “Lowest number of percentage” is also an awkward expression; “lowest proportion” would be clearer. Spelling is inconsistent in “appartment,” and “level out” is not the appropriate form for describing equal figures. Aim for a smaller set of accurate terms such as “share of households,” “home ownership,” “rented accommodation,” “rose” and “fell.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast in the overview and time clauses such as “before dropped to around 65%.” The main trends remain understandable, but some errors in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction reduce accuracy. For example, “Households … was increased” should be “the proportion of households … increased,” while “households … was around 75%” requires a plural verb or a singular subject such as “the proportion.” In “before dropped,” use “before dropping” or “before it dropped.” The sentence beginning “Overall” also joins contrasting ideas without a clear grammatical structure. Practise making the percentage or proportion the subject, and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms when linking events.

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