Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart delineates the percentage of two categories of households rented and owned accomodation in two countries England and wales between 1918 adn 2011.

Overall, rented accommodation started with a high of around 76 percent in 1918; however, this ratio declined rapidly, whereas the ratio of owned households at low of around 22 percent before increasing constantly.

Rented households, initially, stood at around 76 percent in 1918 before dropping significantly. This ratio equalized with owned accommodation at 50 percent in 1971. This ratio continued to fall until 2001 and recorded around 31 percent, and then marginally rose to around 35 percent in 2011.

In contrast, owned accommodation started at a low of 22 percent in 1918 before rising substantially and equalized with rented accommodation in 1971 at 50 percent and surged to around 69 percent in 2001. This ratio mrginally declined after one decade to 65 percent in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response identifies the main pattern accurately: renting falls from about 76% to a low of roughly 31% in 2001, while ownership rises from around 22% to a peak near 69%, before both move in the opposite direction by 2011. It also notes the key crossover at 50% in 1971 and gives relevant figures to support the trends. The overview is clear, although “declined rapidly” slightly overstates a change that occurs across several decades, and “increasing constantly” does not reflect the plateau between 1939 and 1953 or the later dip after 2001. To strengthen the summary further, describe these pauses and the final reversal more precisely rather than presenting the trends as uninterrupted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear four-part structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for rented and owned accommodation. The information is generally sequenced logically, and contrast markers such as “Overall” and “In contrast” help the reader follow the comparison. The repeated phrase “This ratio” in both detail paragraphs, however, makes the linking feel mechanical and occasionally leaves the reference less precise. The two trend paragraphs also repeat the 1971 equality, which could be stated once and then used to develop the later changes. More varied referencing and a tighter division between overview and supporting details would make the progression smoother and more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

There is some useful task-specific vocabulary, including “percentage,” “declined,” “surged,” and “marginally rose,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise: “delineates” is not the most suitable verb for describing a chart, “ratio” is repeatedly used where “proportion” or “percentage” is clearer, and “equalized with” is awkward for two figures becoming the same. Spelling errors such as “accomodation,” “adn,” and “mrginally,” along with inconsistent capitalization of “Wales,” are noticeable. Aim for accurate, natural chart language and proofread spelling carefully; this would make the vocabulary more precise and reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts a mix of sentence forms, including a contrast clause with “whereas” and time clauses such as “before dropping” and “after one decade.” The overall meaning remains understandable, but grammatical control is uneven. For example, “the ratio of owned households at low of around 22 percent” is missing a verb and an article, while “owned accommodation started at a low of 22 percent … before rising” has an unclear subject because accommodation itself does not rise. The opening sentence also has a crowded noun phrase, and the semicolon before “however” is not punctuated correctly. Use complete, clearly structured sentences, and check articles, verb patterns, and punctuation when combining clauses.

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