Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

THE BAR GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THAT THE PROPOSATION OF CITIZENS WHO HAD OWN THE HOUSES AND RENTED HOUSEHOLDS IN ENGLAND AND WALES IN YEAT 1918 TILL 2011.

CONSIDERING FROM OVERALL PERSPECTIVE IT CAN BE COMPREHENSIVELY OBSERVED THAT IN INNITIAL YEAR HOUSEHOLDS OWNED WAS LEAST LATER IT WOULD INCREASE WHILST RENTED HOUSEHOLDS WERE HIGHEST.

TO COMMENCE WITH, IN YEAR 1918 THE HOUSEHOLDS ONWNED WAS LEAST WHICH WAS 23% WHILE RENTED HOUSEHOLDS WAS HIGHEST AMONG ALL YEARS WHICH WAS 78%. HOUSEHOLDS OWNED WAS SIGHTLY INCREASE BY 10% AND RENTED HOUSEHOLD DECREASED BY 10% IN 1939. SIMILARLY, IN 1953 IT REMAINED SAME AS 1939 WHICH WAS 32% AND 68%. HOUSEHOLDS OWNED INCREASED IN 1961 WHICH WAS 41% AND RENTED HOUSEHOLDS DECREASEDWHICH WAS 59%. SURPRISINGLY, THE HOUSEHOLDS OWNED AND RENTED WERE SAME 50% RESPECTIVELY.

MOREOVER,IN 1981 THE HOUSEHOLDS OWNED CONSTANTLY INCREASED WHICH WAS 60% AND RETED HOUSEHOLD DECREASED BY 10% WHICH WAS 40%. FURTHERMORE, IN 1991 HOUSEHOLDS OWNED BY ALMOST 68% AND RENTED BY 33% WHICH IS ALMOST HALF OF INITIAL YEAR. PARADOXICALLY,IN 2001 HIGHTEST HOUSEHOLDS OBSERVED BY 69% AND LEAST IN RENTED HOUSEHOLDS WHICH WAS 31%. IN 2011 AGAIN DECREMENT SEEN IN OWNED HOUSEHOLDS AND INCREMENT IN RENTED HOUSEHOLD WHICH WERE 64%AND 35%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the full period and report the central pattern: ownership rises from 23% to a peak of 69% in 2001, while renting generally falls before partly recovering by 2011. The comparison that the figures meet at 50% in 1971 is also a useful key feature. Most figures are close to the chart, although the 1918 rented share is 77%, not 78%, and the 2011 rented share is about 36%, not 35%. Your overview is relevant but could be more precise: it should state that ownership overtakes renting in 1981 and that the two trends reverse slightly in the final decade. Some details, such as the changes between individual years, are reported more fully than the overall pattern is explained.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by chronological details, with a paragraph break before the later years. Time markers such as “in 1918,” “similarly,” and “furthermore” help readers follow the sequence. However, the progression is often mechanical because nearly every sentence begins with a year or a linking expression, and the repeated “households owned” and “rented households” make the account feel list-like. Some connections are unclear, as in “which is almost half of initial year,” where the comparison is difficult to identify. Grouping the early decline in renting and the later ownership majority into clearer stages, and using more precise referencing, would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “increased,” “decreased,” “remained same,” and “highest,” so the main trends can generally be understood. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “proposation of citizens,” “households owned,” “constantly increased,” and “decrement seen.” Spelling errors—including “yeat,” “innitial,” “onwned,” and “hightest”—also make the writing less clear and polished. Some words, such as “surprisingly” and “paradoxically,” add an evaluative tone that is not appropriate for a neutral chart summary. Aim for precise trend language and standard collocations, for example, “the proportion of households that owned their homes” and “ownership peaked.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine clauses using “while,” “which,” and “although”-type contrasts, and the reader can usually identify the intended comparisons. However, sentence structures are limited and many sentences contain errors in agreement, tense, articles, or sentence construction. For example, “the households owned was least” does not form a correct clause, while “households owned increased in 1961 which was 41%” attaches the figure unclearly. The opening sentence also lacks a well-formed main clause. These recurring problems sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Practise accurate patterns such as “The proportion of owner-occupied homes rose to 41% in 1961, while the rented share fell to 59%,” then vary these structures while checking subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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