Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of owned houses and rented accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011

Overall, the households in rented acccommodation was the higest propotion over the timeframe, while it decline gradually, However the households in owned accommodation was started at lowest position, which was steadly rose up and reached at allmost the rented appartments

To commence with, in 1918 the owend appartments was recorded at 24% followed by increased just over the 30% in 1953 and it countinuos increased in 1971 stood at 50%. but it steadly rock up and in 2001 it was almost at below to 70%, while it slightly decline in 2011 was at 64%

In contrast, rented accommodation was at peak point in 1918 counted at 78%. but it decline in 1953 stoood at 68% and it countinuly follow the down trend in 1971 at 50% and in 1991 counted at 32% but in 2011 it slightly increase at 37%

In couclusion, the percentage of own apparments was increased the individuals prefer to buy own house then rented a house

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report its central contrast: ownership generally rose while renting generally fell, with both at 50% in 1971. Several figures are close to the chart, including ownership at about 24% in 1918 and 64% in 2011, and renting at about 78% and 37% in those years. However, the overview says renting remained the highest throughout, which overlooks the crossover in 1971 and the fact that ownership was higher from 1981 to 2011. The final claim that people increasingly preferred buying is an interpretation not established by the chart. Make the overview more precise by identifying the crossover and the later reversal in 2011, and focus the conclusion on the data rather than inferred motives.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, separate paragraphs for ownership and renting, and a concluding sentence. The two main data paragraphs also make the comparison easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “In contrast” help signal the shift between categories. This coherent structure meets the lower-band expectations and shows some features of stronger progression. However, transitions within sentences are often mechanical or unclear: repeated “but” and “and” links make the sequence of changes feel like a list, while the overview’s “However” does not clearly connect to the preceding point. Use a small range of precise links such as “by comparison,” “thereafter,” and “whereas,” and ensure each sentence has a clear relationship to the one before it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “recorded,” “decline,” and “down trend,” so the reader can generally understand the topic and direction of change. However, the range is limited and several choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “rock up,” “at peak point,” and “almost at below to 70%.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “acccommodation,” “higest,” “propotion,” and “countinuly,” which make the writing less clear and less controlled. Use standard terms for describing data, such as “rose steadily,” “reached a peak,” and “just under 70%,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid calling the figures “apartments” when the chart reports households in accommodation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can usually follow the broad trends. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent, particularly in longer clauses. For example, “the households in rented accommodation was” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “which was steadly rose up” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence beginning “In 1918 the owend appartments was recorded” also needs a clearer grammatical subject and construction. Punctuation and capitalisation are unreliable, as in “50%. but it,” and several sentences run together. Practise accurate past-tense reporting patterns, such as “the proportion rose to 50%,” and divide longer sequences into complete sentences with consistent punctuation.

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