Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates about the percentage of households owned and rented accommodation in England and wales between 1918 to 2011.

According to the chart the information about rented and owned house are as follow;In 1918 household peoples are at 25 percent and the rented acommodation people are on rented house and the ratio of rented house is at 77 or 78 percent.In 1939 some people built there houses and they are on 32 percent and rented people comes to 68 percent.After some years in 1953 there are not some big changes and in 1961 there is some changes some people built there houses and they are on 41 percent and the rented peoples are at 59 percent.After some years and in 1971 there are big changes the rented and the owners are at same percent like 50/50.In 1981 peoples are became rich and they made their owen houses and they are on 60 percent and on the other side the rebted peoples are on 40 percents.In 2001 the number of owners increase and they are on 70 percents.and after 10 years in 2011 the owners ratio are at 65 percents and the rented houses are at 35 %.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both categories and report the broad shift from renting towards ownership, including the equal 50% point in 1971 and the later reversal in 2011. However, the response gives no clear overview of the main pattern, and several figures are inaccurate: ownership is about 69%, not 70%, in 2001, and about 64%, not 65%, in 2011. The claim that people became rich and therefore bought homes is not shown by the chart. The opening also describes the chart imprecisely, and the account focuses mainly on year-by-year details rather than selecting the most important features. A concise overview and more accurate comparisons would make the report more complete and relevant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the years in chronological order, so readers can generally trace the changes, and phrases such as “After some years” and “on the other side” attempt to connect information. However, almost the entire report is presented as one long paragraph, with no distinct overview or clear grouping of trends. The repeated sequence of “After some years” and “In [year]” makes the progression mechanical, while the semicolon and full stops do not consistently separate ideas. Some references, such as “they” and “the rented peoples,” are unclear. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs, grouping related periods and using clearer links.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on words such as “people,” “some,” “changes,” and “percent” to describe the data. Several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, including “household peoples,” “rented peoples,” and “built there houses”; these choices make parts of the report difficult to interpret. Spelling errors such as “acommodation,” “owen,” and “rebted” also weaken clarity. There are some relevant terms, including “owners” and “ratio,” but the response needs more precise language for describing chart trends and proportions. Practise collocations such as “the proportion of households,” “rose,” “remained stable,” and “fell,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report several years in connected sentences, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined by repeated “and,” and frequent grammatical errors sometimes make relationships unclear. For example, “the percentage of households owned and rented accommodation” lacks a suitable structure, while “the owners ratio are at 65 percents” has problems with agreement and sentence formation. Tense and verb forms are also inconsistent in “peoples are became rich,” and articles and plural forms are often missing or misused. Punctuation is weak, particularly where sentences run together after “as follow;In.” Build shorter, complete sentences first, then practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement.

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