Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this chart display the the percentage of housetakers in there property and shared and leased housing in england and wales in the middel of 1918 and 2011 witch is shown in graph.

overall view is that in 2001 house holders is less instead of hired accommodation and if we talk about 2011 the rate of house holders is above.

in this graph in 1918 rentid accamudation is nesar to 80% and owen houses is more then 20% if we talk about 1939 own houses goin bit rise and near to 32% and persentage of own houses going down and near to 69% in 1953 is eqal and in 1961 more increas and go to 40% and rentid hoses grt decreses in 1971 both are equal in rate and in 1981 rentied houses downfall is started and its rate is decreasing day by day and now its come to close the maximimun 34%and rate of own houses is going up day by day

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two categories and report several broad movements, including the near-equal shares in 1971 and the rise in ownership over much of the period. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: you say ownership was higher in 2011, whereas renting was still 36% compared with ownership at 64%—so ownership was higher, but the statement needs a clear comparison and context. The claim that ownership fell to about 69% in 1953 is incorrect; it was about 32%, and 69% was the 2001 peak. You also omit the overall reversal from renting dominance to ownership dominance and the slight change after 2001. Select the main trends accurately and support them with key dates and figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to move chronologically through the years, and the response includes an opening and an overview-like statement. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear, purposeful paragraphs, and the long final section strings many dates and comparisons together. This makes the progression difficult to follow, especially where the account shifts from 1939 to 1953 and then to later years. Linking phrases such as “if we talk about” are repeated and do not clearly show the relationship between points. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and one or two detail paragraphs; use clear transitions such as “by contrast,” “thereafter,” and “by 2001” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “rate,” “rise,” and “decreases,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and many word choices, collocations, and spellings make the account difficult to understand: “housetakers,” “shared and leased housing,” “rentid accamudation,” and “downfall” are not suitable or accurate descriptions here. Repetition of “houses” and “rate” also reduces precision. Use the chart’s terms consistently—“home ownership” and “rented accommodation”—and choose verbs that describe trends precisely, such as “increased,” “declined,” “peaked,” and “remained stable.” Check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect several ideas in longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are unclear. For example, “in 1971 both are equal in rate and in 1981…” combines multiple time points without a clear grammatical structure. There are frequent problems with tense and agreement, as in “house holders is less” and “own houses goin bit rise,” as well as missing or incorrect articles and punctuation. These errors sometimes make the intended comparisons hard to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences with a consistent past tense for the historical data: “Ownership rose to 32% in 1939 and remained unchanged in 1953.” Then check subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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