Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart gives information about accommodation in England and Wales. The pie chart shows the information by representing the main features.

Overall, it can be observed that the percentage of households should be changed by changing years. The two household represents the owned accommodation and rented accommodation. In 1918, percentage of owned accommodation rises upto 20% approximately. While in rented accommodation, percentage grew upto 75%. In 1971, the percentage of owned accommodation and rented accommodation should be same as 50%. In 2011, percentage of households of owned accommodation rises upto 60%. While percentage in rented accommodation increased upto 30%.

In 1918, the owned accommodation has the increased value as compared to the others.While the percentage of rented accommodation has the maximum value in 2001. The pie chart compares the households in owned accommodation with the households in rented accommodation. The chart reveals the distribution of percentage of households between 1918 and 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two categories and include relevant reference points, especially the equal 50% shares in 1971 and the broad movement from renting towards ownership. However, the overview is vague (“the percentage of households should be changed”) and does not clearly summarise the main trend: ownership generally rose to a peak of about 69% in 2001 before falling, while renting followed the reverse pattern. Some figures are inaccurate: in 1918 ownership was about 23% and renting 77%, not approximately 20% and 75%; in 2011 the figures were about 64% and 36%, rather than 60% and 30%. The claim that renting was highest in 2001 is also incorrect; it was highest in 1918. Select and report the key changes more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has paragraph breaks and attempts to group an overview with details, so there is some basic organisation. However, ideas do not progress clearly: the final paragraph repeats that the chart compares ownership and renting, while the opening incorrectly calls it a pie chart. The sequence of years is also disrupted when the response moves from 2011 back to 1918 and then repeats general information. Linking words such as “While” are used as sentence openings without a clear connection to the preceding clause, and “In 1918” is repeated. Organise the report into a concise introduction, a clear overview, and chronological detail paragraphs, using comparisons to connect the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart’s subject and categories, with phrases such as “owned accommodation,” “rented accommodation,” and “percentage of households.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive. Calling the visual a “pie chart” is a significant word-choice error, and “the percentage … should be changed” does not express a clear trend. Phrases such as “rises upto” and “grew upto” are awkward for describing chart data, while “the increased value” is imprecise. Use standard reporting language such as “the proportion rose,” “accounted for,” and “reached a peak,” and vary repeated references to percentages and households.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple clauses and attempt longer comparisons, including “In 1971, the percentage … should be same as 50%.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but errors are frequent and the range of sentence structures is limited. For example, “the two household represents” has a number-agreement error, and “should be same as 50%” needs a different verb construction and an article (“was the same, at 50%”). The fragments beginning “While in rented accommodation” and “While percentage…” are not complete sentences in this context. There are also punctuation problems, including the missing space after “others.” Aim for complete clauses, accurate past-tense reporting, and carefully joined comparisons.

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