Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart elucidate information about the percentage of houe holds in owend and rented accommodation in Englade and Wales between 1918 and 2011.Accoding to the chart house holders owend 22% in 1981.Households in rented persantage 78%. Owned accommodation persantage in 1939 is 31% and rented persantage 68%. Owned accommodation in 1953 is 31% and rented by 69 persantage. In 1961 Owned accommodation persantage is 40% and rented accmmodation is 59%. next in 1971 owned accammodation is 50% and same rented accamodation is 50%. In1981 persantagre of owned accmmodation is 60% and rented is 31%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two categories and report several figures from 1939 to 1981, including the point where ownership and renting are equal in 1971. However, the response does not provide an overview of the main trends: ownership generally rises while renting falls, before both shift slightly in 2011. The opening figure is also assigned to 1981, although 22% ownership and 78% renting correspond to 1918; the 1981 rented figure should be about 40%, not 31%. The account stops at 1981 and omits the later years, including the peak in ownership in 2001 and its decline by 2011. It is also substantially below the required 150 words. Add a clear overview and accurately cover the full period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly chronological order, moving from early years through 1981, and the repeated references to owned and rented accommodation make the topic identifiable. However, it is presented as one continuous block, with no clear introduction, overview, or paragraphing to distinguish the main trends from supporting figures. The sequence is also difficult to follow because the first figures are labelled as 1981 and then 1981 appears again near the end. Connectors such as “next” provide only basic linking and do not establish a clear overall progression. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two chronological detail paragraphs, and use time references consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “owned accommodation,” and “rented accommodation,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is narrow and the same terms are repeated rather than using precise language to describe trends and comparisons. Several spelling errors—“houe holds,” “owend,” “Englade,” “Accoding,” and “persantage”—make the writing less clear and reduce accuracy. Some forms, such as “house holders,” are also not the natural term for the chart; “households” is appropriate. Build a small set of accurate trend expressions, such as “the proportion of households owning their homes rose,” “renting declined,” and “the figures were equal,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the response consists of short, simple statements, for example, “Owned accommodation in 1953 is 31%” and “In 1961 Owned accommodation persantage is 40%.” This basic structure communicates individual figures, but there is little variety in sentence forms and few links between related comparisons. Verb tense is inconsistent for describing historical data: use the past tense, such as “was” or “stood at,” rather than “is.” Punctuation and spacing are also unreliable, as in “2011.Accoding” and “In1981.” Practise combining figures into accurate comparative sentences—for example, “Ownership rose to 50% in 1971, matching the proportion of rented homes”—and use consistent past-tense reporting.

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