Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart depicts the percentage of households is owned and rented accomodation in English and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall, the given data is that the numbers of rented accomodation was 76 percent and lowest the owners roughly was 23 percent in 1918.

As we can see that, the rented housedolds was decreased over the years and the owners of households increased. In 1971, both were the same 50 percent but after that, the households in owned accomodation was surged and the households in rented accomodation was fell. In 1991, the ratio was half rentend than owners. In 2011, the owners owns was 64 percent and the rented owns was 37 percent was nearly half.

Finally, in the past, the owners was less and the renters was high in England and Wales in 1971, was same both. In 2011, the renters was less and owners was larged nearly half ratio

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report its central pattern: renting declines while ownership rises, with both reaching 50% in 1971. You also include useful endpoint figures, such as ownership at about 23% in 1918 and 64% in 2011. These relevant observations address the task, but the overview is unclear because it focuses first on the 1918 figures rather than summarising the overall change. Some comparisons are imprecise: in 1991 ownership was 68% versus renting at 32%, not exactly half, and in 2011 the figures were 64% and 36%, so renting was not “nearly half” of ownership. Develop the overview around the full trend and report comparisons accurately to make the key features clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs and a broadly sensible order, moving from an introduction to trends and then a concluding statement. Connectors such as “Overall,” “As we can see,” and “Finally” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is weakened by repetition: the final paragraph restates that ownership was lower earlier and higher by 2011 without adding a distinct comparison. Some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “In 1991, the ratio was half rentend than owners,” which makes the relationship difficult to follow. Organise the body by describing the early period and the later reversal, then finish with a concise overview rather than repeating the same points. Use linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship between figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “decreased,” “increased,” and “same,” so the reader can identify the main trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. For example, “the rented housedolds” and “the rented owns” do not correctly name the category; “the owners owns” is also an unsuitable expression for households in owned accommodation. “Surged” overstates the gradual rise shown in the chart, while “larged” is not the appropriate form. Spelling errors such as “accomodation,” “rentend,” and “housedolds” further reduce precision. Practise standard chart phrases such as “the proportion of households in rented accommodation” and “rose gradually.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast with “but after that,” and the main trend can generally be understood. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement and sentence construction frequently make individual statements difficult to read. Examples include “the numbers of rented accomodation was,” “the households … was surged,” and “the owners was less,” where subjects and verbs do not agree or the verb form is unsuitable. The opening also has a faulty structure: “the percentage of households is owned and rented accommodation.” Work on forming complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense reporting. Short, accurate comparisons such as “Ownership rose, while renting fell” would improve clarity before you attempt longer sentences.

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