Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart demonstrates the average percentage of family living in private house compared people staying in a rented house in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, the people living in rented house was noticeably high in starting years, however, the figure drops in the following years and owned accommodation takes the lead.

To begin with, there were just over 20% people living in personal place in 1918, whereas the family living in rented house were almost four times than people staying in owned one. In the year 1939 and 1953, the figure of people living in a private house rose to almost 30%, while the people having a rented home were dropped to almost 65%. Moreover, the people staying in personal house were increased to 40% in 1961, by contrast the people having rented house modestly decrease to nearly 58%.

In addition, the gradual rise and fall had made the figure same for both people having personal house or living in rented home in 1971 to 50%. The significant increase had made figure peaked at roughly 69% in 2001 for people having personal home and the people living in rented home surged to 30% in 2001. Although, the figure for people staying in rented house rose to 38% in 2011 and the people having private home were declined by 10% in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response identifies the main pattern clearly: renting was more common at the start, ownership rose over time, and the two figures met in 1971. It also selects relevant comparisons, including the ownership peak in 2001 and the reversal by 2011. Most reported values are close to the chart, though the final ownership decline is described as 10 percentage points rather than the chart’s 5, and the 2011 rented figure is slightly overstated. The overview is relevant, but the account could be more precise about the later plateau around 1991–2001 and the modest changes before the final reversal. More consistently accurate comparisons would strengthen an otherwise well-focused summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear four-paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to chronological details. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “In addition” help the reader follow the timeline, and comparisons using “whereas” and “by contrast” are appropriate. This gives the report a coherent overall progression. However, some linking is mechanical or imprecise: “Moreover” introduces another year rather than a distinct supporting point, while “Although” begins a sentence without completing a clear contrast. The final paragraph also combines the 1971 equality, the 2001 peak and the 2011 changes, making its progression less smooth. Grouping the early years and later years more deliberately, and using clearer references to each series, would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough topic vocabulary to communicate the chart’s subject, including “percentage,” “accommodation,” “rented,” and “peaked.” It also attempts varied expressions such as “gradual rise” and “significant increase.” However, word choice and collocation are often unnatural or repetitive: “people staying in a rented house” is used where the chart concerns households, and “personal place” or “private house” does not accurately express home ownership. Phrases such as “four times than” and “the figure ... surged to 30%” are also awkward or misleading. These choices sometimes make the description less precise, despite the overall meaning being recoverable. Prefer standard chart language and repeat “households” or “the proportion” where needed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “whereas,” “while,” and “although,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, errors recur in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “the people living in rented house was” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “the figure ... rose” is followed by “the people ... were dropped,” an incorrect passive form. “The people staying in personal house were increased” repeats this issue, and the final “Although” clause is not punctuated or structured as a complete contrast. These patterns limit accuracy even when the intended trend is clear. Practise forming direct active statements such as “the proportion of households renting fell,” and check agreement and clause completeness.

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