Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided bar graph compares the proportion of acccommodations which are rented or owned in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, the owned household accomoddations substanitially increased over the period whereas, rented gradually declined.

Looking at the bar graph in detail, In 1918 rental accommodations were near 80% meanwhile the homwownership was just above 20%. Following years the proportion of rental apartments were plummated and ownership grew cosiderably. In 1971, the both categories were at equal proportion.

In contrast, In 1981 the people who aere living in rental properties were 40% and people who owned their homes were 60%. The ownership surged at above 65% in 1991 additionaly, the rented houses recorded above 30%. The owned houses peaked up at near 70% and other category remained almost same in 2001. Eventually, In 2011 the ownership took a slight dip at above 60% and rental houses stayed at near 40%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and gives a clear overview of the main opposing trends: ownership rises overall while renting declines. It also selects useful comparisons, including the equal 50% shares in 1971, the 60/40 split in 1981, and the slight reversal by 2011. These details are broadly consistent with the chart, and the approximate descriptions such as “near 80%” are acceptable. The account addresses the task and supports its overview with relevant data. To make the report more fully developed, include the early plateau from 1939 to 1953 and distinguish the 1991 and 2001 figures more precisely: ownership was about 68% and 69%, respectively, before falling to 64% in 2011.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail sections. Its progression from the starting figures through the crossover and later years is generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “Eventually” help signal stages. This gives the report a coherent overall arrangement. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward, and the sequence of comparisons is not always smooth. For example, “Following years” does not clearly specify the period, while “The owned houses peaked up… and other category remained almost same” compresses two trends without a clear relationship. Use more precise transitions and group the figures into clear phases, such as the early decline in renting and the later plateau and reversal.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “rented,” “owned,” “surged,” and “slight dip,” and it attempts to vary the language used to describe change. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the account less natural. Examples include “accommodations” for households in accommodation, “rental apartments,” “plummated,” and “peaked up.” There are also misspellings such as “acccommodations,” “accomoddations,” and “cosiderably.” These errors limit precision despite the reader being able to understand the main trends. Prefer standard data-reporting expressions such as “the proportion of households,” “fell sharply,” and “reached a peak,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the main comparisons are usually understandable. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, particularly in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For instance, “In 1971, the both categories were at equal proportion” has an unnecessary article and an awkward singular construction; “the proportion of rental apartments were” has subject–verb disagreement; and “the people who aere living…” uses an unnecessary relative clause and an incorrect verb form. Capitalisation after commas is also inconsistent, as in “In contrast, In 1981.” These recurring errors make some sentences less fluent. Build accuracy with direct structures such as “In 1971, the two figures were equal” and check agreement and sentence boundaries.

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