Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrates percentage of housholds in owned and rental accomodation in england and wales between 1918 and 2011.

overall, households in rental accomodation rate is higher as compared to owned houses moreover at mid both percentage is at same rate of households and gradually after that owned homes increases than rental houses.

The households in 1918 is 78 percent after that in 1939 it is at 68 %. In 1953 the percentage is 69 and from now onwards percentage decreases from from 1961 to 2011. the rate at 1961 is 59 next it is 50 next at 40 than slowly decreases to 32%. In 2011 the percentage is

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and report the broad shift from renting to owning, including the point at which the figures meet. However, the overview is unclear: “rental accommodation rate is higher” is not true across the whole period, since ownership becomes higher after 1971. The figures for renting are mostly recognisable, but 1953 is given as 69% rather than about 68%, and the final sentence stops before reporting the 2011 value. More importantly, the ownership series is not described, so the main comparison is incomplete. The response also contains 101 words, below the required 150; this leaves important features and comparisons undeveloped. Add a complete overview and report both series across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening, an overview and a paragraph of figures. Time markers such as “In 1918,” “In 1953” and “In 2011” help signal chronology. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines several ideas in one unclear sentence, and the data paragraph moves through years without clearly distinguishing the two accommodation types. Linking phrases such as “after that,” “next” and “than” are repetitive or awkward, while the unfinished final sentence interrupts the flow. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the overview and key details, and group comparable trends rather than listing years in sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses relevant basic terms, including “percentage,” “owned” and “rental accommodation,” so the subject is generally identifiable. However, the vocabulary range is limited and some choices are inaccurate or repetitive: “rate” is used where “proportion” or “percentage” is more suitable, and “owned houses” and “rental houses” do not consistently describe households’ accommodation. Spelling errors such as “housholds,” “accomodation” and “england” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. The phrase “at mid” is also unclear. Build a small set of precise chart-description terms and check spelling, especially for repeated key vocabulary; this will make the comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent and the range remains limited. For example, “The households in 1918 is 78 percent” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “overall, households in rental accomodation rate is higher” lacks a clear grammatical structure. The sentence beginning “In 1953…” contains a confusing sequence of clauses, and “from from 1961” shows insufficient proofreading. The final clause, “In 2011 the percentage is,” is incomplete and leaves the meaning unfinished. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles and punctuation. Shorter, accurate comparisons would improve clarity before attempting more complex structures.

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