Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the proportion of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall, the percentage of households in owned accomodation has increase over the years as compared to households rented accomodation which was decreased over the the period of time.The highest percentage of households in rented accommodation was the highest in 1918 as compared to households in owned accommodation which was at its lowest.

In detail,1918 was the year where households in rented accomdation was at its peak accounts for 75% whereas the the households in owned accomdation was at its lowest accounts for 23%.The proportion of rented accommdation decreases steadily while on the other hand, the hoseholds in owned accomodation increased at a constant proportion untill 1971 in which both the rented and owned accomodation ratio levelled off with a 50%.Furthermore,In 1981 the households with owned accommodation continued its growth to 60% and surged to almost 70 % making it its highest proportion.In contrast following the same year the households continued its fall and make it lowest with 32% in 2001 and by then a liitle increased to 35% in 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main pattern and make relevant comparisons: ownership rises from 23% to a peak of about 69% in 2001, while renting generally falls, and the two categories meet at 50% in 1971. The opening and overview also identify the period and the broad contrast. This is a strong response to the task, though some details are less fully reported: the plateau in ownership from 1939 to 1953 and the slight dip in 2011 are not clearly explained. There is also a factual slip in saying rented accommodation reached its lowest at 32% in 2001; it was about 31% then, and the lowest figure shown is 31%. More precise reporting of the later reversal would strengthen the account.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to a detail paragraph, and the chronology is generally easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “In contrast” and “Furthermore” help signal comparisons. However, progression within the detail paragraph is sometimes crowded, with several years and trends joined into long sentences. Connectors are also used mechanically or inaccurately: “while on the other hand” is redundant, and “Furthermore” does not clearly introduce a new point. Punctuation and spacing around transitions are inconsistent, which makes the flow less controlled. Grouping the early period, the 1971 crossover, and the later peak and decline into clearer stages would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “peak,” “decreases steadily,” “surged,” and “in contrast,” so the main trends are communicated. However, the range is somewhat repetitive, particularly with repeated forms of “households,” “accommodation,” and “increased/decreased.” Several word-choice and collocation problems reduce precision: “in a constant proportion” does not naturally describe a trend, and “make it lowest” is unclear. Spelling errors such as “accomdation,” “accommdation,” “hoseholds,” and “liitle” are noticeable. Aim for accurate, natural trend language and check spelling carefully; this would make the description more fluent and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “whereas” and “while,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “has increase” should be “has increased,” while “households … was” needs plural agreement. The phrase “the proportion … decreases steadily” shifts tense in a past-period report, and “both … ratio levelled off with a 50%” is not a well-formed clause. Several sentences also run together or lack appropriate punctuation. Use consistent past tense, check subject–verb agreement, and divide long sentences into complete, controlled clauses.

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