Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compares the percentage of households owned and rented accommodation in england and wales between the time period of 1918 and 2011.

ovrall,the households in rented accommodation was highest in 1918.while households of owned accommodation was lowest in1918. onother hand,In 2001 and 2011

had highest households owned accommodation while households of rented accommodation had lowest percent od rent accommodation

In 1939and 1953 we saw minor deline in rent accommodation.in contrast the owned accommodation was increase 10 percent. while in the time period of 1971 to 1981 was same percent of household of rent and owned accommodation

finally in 1961 had sharpl

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and mention relevant features, including the high level of renting in 1918 and the equal ownership and renting figures in 1971. However, the response is incomplete and the overview is unclear: ownership peaked in 2001, not in both 2001 and 2011, and renting was lowest in 2001, not across both years. The final sentence, “finally in 1961 had sharpl”, is unfinished, leaving a key comparison unexplained. The response contains 94 words, below the required 150, so several important stages and figures are not reported. To improve, complete the summary and accurately describe the overall rise in ownership and fall in renting, including the slight reversal by 2011.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response by introducing the chart, giving an overview, and then referring to changes across the years. Linking expressions such as “in contrast” and “finally” also show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview and details run together, and several statements are incomplete or unclear, especially “In 2001 and 2011 had highest households owned accommodation” and the unfinished final sentence. Punctuation and spacing also make boundaries between ideas hard to identify. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, and build complete sentences in chronological or comparative order, with clear references to the relevant years and figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage”, “accommodation”, “increase” and “decline”, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “households of owned accommodation”, “minor deline” and “percent od rent accommodation”. Spelling and capitalisation errors, including “ovrall” and “england”, also reduce clarity. Some phrases are difficult to interpret because the wording is not idiomatic. Build a small set of accurate chart-description expressions and use them consistently—for example, “the proportion of households that owned their homes” and “the figure for renting fell”. Check spelling and word forms before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to compare trends using clauses introduced by “while” and “in contrast”, but most sentences are incomplete or contain errors in basic sentence structure. For example, “In 2001 and 2011 had highest households owned accommodation” has no clear subject, and “the households in rented accommodation was highest” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The final phrase, “finally in 1961 had sharpl”, is not a complete sentence, and punctuation does not reliably separate ideas. The response shows little control of varied sentence patterns, which makes some meanings difficult to follow. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences first, then add comparisons with “whereas” or “while”; check agreement, articles, and sentence endings.

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