Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Thia paragraph is about the comparison of accomodation of owned and rented houses in England and Wales. Initially at the start of 1918 there would be a greater accomodation of rented houses .it means many poeples live in rented houses instead of own houses .There should be only 25 percent peoples live in there own houses and 75 percent people live in rented houses 75 percent peoples have no own property as sach .This was due to some unemployement or lack of jobs to some peoples who are not able to get their own property or houses. with the passage of time from 1953 to 1971 the rate of rented houses reduces and the rate of owned huses becomes gradually increases many peoples live in there own huses independently without any restriction or any rent payment bcs the government start improving there policies and peoples get more jobs become independent . In 1918 rate of owned houses and the rate of owned houses after 1981 where compeletly different there should be a graduall development of owned houses and accomodation of rented huses declines .This graph actually shows how England and Wales become developed countries

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s central contrast: renting is much more common at the beginning, while ownership rises over time. Your approximate opening figures of 25% owning and 75% renting are close to the chart. However, the account is only partial: it does not clearly summarise the full period or report the key turning point in 1971, when the two categories are equal, and the 2011 reversal from the ownership peak is omitted. The explanation that changes resulted from unemployment, government policies and job growth is not shown by the chart, so it should be removed. Focus on describing the data, including the rise in ownership to about 69% in 2001 and its subsequent fall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic chronological thread, moving from 1918 through later years, and the reader can recognise that the response compares ownership with renting. However, ideas are not arranged into clear stages, and the response is presented as one long paragraph. Several sentences combine chart description with unsupported explanations, making the progression difficult to follow. References such as “This” and “there” are sometimes unclear, while repeated links such as “with the passage of time” do not establish precise relationships between the figures. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the main periods; use clear comparisons such as “whereas” and “by contrast” to connect the two trends.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “owned,” “rented,” “rate,” and “declines,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “greater accomodation of rented houses,” “rate of rented houses,” and “live in there own houses.” Repetition of “houses” and “peoples” also makes the description less precise. Spelling errors, including “accomodation,” “poeples,” “unemployement,” and “compeletly,” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Use standard chart language such as “the proportion of households,” “home ownership,” and “the share of rented accommodation,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “with the passage of time from 1953 to 1971,” but these structures are often difficult to control. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in phrases such as “the rate of owned huses becomes gradually increases” and “many peoples live in there own huses.” Tense and clause boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “This graph actually shows how England and Wales become developed countries.” Punctuation is weak: several sentences run together, and capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent. Use shorter, complete sentences to report each trend, then practise combining them with accurate clauses using “while” or “whereas.”

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