Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given bar chart provides information about the proportion houses that are either owned or rented, reflecting the count for England and Wales from 1918 to 2011, over the period of almost a century.

Overall, it can be seen that, the number of tenants had decreased gradually over the years whereas more people tend to bought their own house during the century.

In the beginning, in year 1918, almost 78% of households were rented, which was the largest number, and after 21 years it reduced by around 10% while it remained stable for the next 14 years. However, from 1953 to1991, the trend dropped by roughly 10% in every 10 years resulting the total to approximately 32% in 1991. Moreover, it rose slightly in 2011 and became 38% after being stable till 2001.

Meanwhile, in 1918, the least number of people used to own a personal accommodation and the count was on about 21% which was the shortest trend of the graph. Later, over the period, the number increased steadily by at max 10% until 2001 and the resulted amount was 69%. Nevertheless, the trend went down slight in 2011 and became roughly 62%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the chart’s central contrast and give a clear overview: renting declines over time while ownership rises, with both series changing direction slightly at the end. The main stages are also covered, including the plateau from 1939 to 1953 and the crossover at 50% in 1971, although the crossover itself could be stated explicitly. Most figures are close to the chart, but the description of ownership as increasing “by at max 10%” is imprecise, and the final values are reported as about 62% and 38% rather than approximately 64% and 36%. These small inaccuracies do not obscure the overall trends. To strengthen the report further, compare the two categories directly at key points and describe the ownership rise more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into a clear introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for rented and owned accommodation. This gives the reader a logical route through the information, and time markers such as “In the beginning,” “from 1953 to 1991,” and “in 2011” help show progression. Linking expressions including “However,” “Moreover,” and “Meanwhile” also connect the stages. At times, though, the sequencing is slightly awkward: “after being stable till 2001” is placed after the 2011 figure, and the two categories are mostly described separately rather than compared at corresponding dates. Use more precise references and occasional direct comparisons to make the progression smoother and the cohesion less formulaic.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “reduced,” “remained stable,” “increased steadily,” and “went down.” These choices make the main movements understandable, and the response avoids excessive repetition of a single trend verb. However, some expressions are imprecise or unnatural for chart reporting: “the count for England and Wales,” “the largest number,” “the shortest trend,” and “the resulted amount.” “People tend to bought” also reflects an inaccurate word form, while “personal accommodation” is not the natural term for this data. Aim for standard collocations such as “the proportion of households,” “the highest share,” and “the figure reached.” More precise vocabulary would improve clarity and control without requiring a more elaborate style.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, using time clauses and contrast, for example, “after 21 years it reduced … while it remained stable” and “Nevertheless, the trend went down … in 2011.” The overall meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. Examples include “the proportion houses,” which needs a linking structure, “people tend to bought,” where the verb form is incorrect, and “resulting the total,” which needs a suitable participle construction. There are also article and punctuation problems, as in “in year 1918” and the comma after “Overall.” Review verb patterns, articles, and sentence boundaries, then proofread each sentence for a complete and correctly formed clause. Greater accuracy in these areas would make your varied structures more effective.

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