Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates that how many pupil are owners and renters in English and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, owners of the accomodations had a greater percentage while the proportion of renters decreased.

Looking at the owned households, about 24% households owned accommodation in 1918. This figure increased to 32% in 1939 and 1953. This proportion increased steadily and reached to 60% in 1981. Moreover, there was a slight increase to 68% in 1991 and the figure rose to just one point, 69 in 2001. The percentage of households decreased slowly to 64% at the end of the period.

Examining the rented households, about 78% pupils rented accommodation in 1918. While it decreased to 69% in 1939 and 1953. The proportion acounted for 59% in 1961 and decreased to 50% in 1971. There was a further decrease to 40% in 1981 and then the figure fell to 32% in 1991 and 31% in 2001. The figure rose up to about 36% at the end of the period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both ownership and renting across the full period, and the overview identifies the broad contrast: ownership generally rose while renting declined. Most figures are accurately reported, including the 2001 peak in ownership and the final reversal in 2011. This gives the response a clear factual basis. However, the overview is not fully precise: ownership did not have a greater share throughout, since renting was higher until the two categories met at 50% in 1971. Also, the opening refers to “pupil” rather than households, which misidentifies what is measured. To strengthen the summary further, make the crossover and the 2011 reversal explicit in the overview, rather than leaving these key features mainly to the detail paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised clearly into an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for owned and rented accommodation. The chronological sequence within each detail paragraph makes the figures easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Examining,” and “at the end of the period” help signal progression. The two series are sensibly presented in parallel, so readers can compare their opposite movements. Some connections are less smooth, particularly the sentence beginning “While it decreased to 69%,” which is grammatically incomplete and interrupts the flow. The overview also gives only a broad comparison rather than guiding the reader to the crossover and late-period change. More precise linking between the two series would make the progression even more effective.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related terms, including “proportion,” “steadily,” “slight increase,” and “decreased,” and the meaning is generally clear. However, several word choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this chart: “pupil” is used for households, “owners of the accommodations” is awkward, and “rose to just one point, 69” does not clearly express the small increase. There are also spelling errors in “accomodations” and “acounted.” Repetition of “figure,” “proportion,” and “decreased” limits flexibility, while some phrases do not collocate naturally. Aim for precise chart vocabulary such as “households,” “share,” “accounted for,” and “rose marginally,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “and then,” and most of the numerical information remains understandable. However, some errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms are noticeable. The opening phrase “illustrates that how many” combines two incompatible patterns; use either “shows the percentage of households” or “illustrates how the percentages changed.” “While it decreased to 69%” is a fragment, and “reached to 60%” uses an unnecessary preposition. There are also agreement and article problems in “24% households” and “the figure rose to … 69 in 2001.” Work on complete clauses, articles, and consistent percentage phrasing; this will improve accuracy while preserving your attempts at varied sentence structures.

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