Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of household in owned and rented accommodation in england and wales around 93 years.

Overall it is clear that,renting accommodation in england and wales by highest percentage of household.Lowest percentage of people using owned house between 1818 and 2011.

Looking at the details,household in rented accommodation starting year peacked at 78% of people using paying house.While,21 years after in 1939 and 1953 almost equal of using 69% people renting house.To begin with,continusly decline in renting hose users ater years by the end of the year only 35% of people using renting accommodation.

Secondly,begun year just 22% of people only using own hose.In addition, nowadays most of the people think by buying own house.So that after the years continusly increased of people owen accommodation using and last year significantly fall in the accommodation user 64%.

In summary,most of the people using renting accommodation in 1918 to 2011.While,owned accommodation user lowest percentage of people in england and wales.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two categories and describe the broad movement from renting towards ownership, including the rise in ownership to 2001 and its fall by 2011. However, the overview is unclear and repeatedly claims renting was the highest and ownership the lowest throughout, which is not true: the figures meet at 50% in 1971, and ownership is higher thereafter until 2011. Several details are also inaccurate: renting was about 77% in 1918, not 78% of people “using paying house,” and the 1939 and 1953 figures were about 68%, not 69%. The response only partly selects and reports the main features; make the crossover and the later reversal explicit, and avoid unsupported explanations about people’s opinions of buying homes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an opening, a general statement, detail paragraphs and a concluding sentence, so there is an attempt to organise the information. Some progression is also visible through phrases such as “Looking at the details” and “Secondly.” However, the sequence is difficult to follow because the overview and conclusion repeat the same inaccurate claim, while the details jump between years and categories without a clear comparison. Connect the figures in chronological order and group the two series together at key points—for example, explain that ownership rose as renting fell, then note their equal share in 1971 and the later change in 2011. Use linking phrases selectively; the current transitions do not always clarify how one point relates to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant terms, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “decline” and “increased,” and the reader can generally recognise that the chart compares ownership and renting. However, vocabulary is limited and repeated, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “people using paying house,” “renting hose users” and “owned accommodation user” are not natural ways to describe household data. There are also spelling errors, including “continusly,” “ater” and “owen.” Use precise chart language such as “households in rented accommodation” and “the proportion of owner-occupiers,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences, including “So that after the years continusly increased of people owen accommodation using,” but these structures are often faulty and obscure the intended meaning. Many sentences lack a clear subject or use an incorrect verb pattern, as in “renting accommodation … by highest percentage” and “continusly increased of people.” Agreement and article use are also inconsistent in “proportion of household” and “the accommodation user.” Punctuation is frequently misplaced, with spaces missing after commas and sentence openings such as “While” left as fragments. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons: for example, “The proportion of households owning their homes rose from 23% in 1918 to 50% in 1971.”

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