Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates data about households in owned and rented accommodation in two cities (England and Wales) from 1918 to 2011.The units are measured in percentages.

Overall, From [redacted phone],The largest amount of families used to live in rented houses. while, in 1971 the same number of individuals preferred both category similarly. Moreover, from 1981 to the next twenty years the number of owned houses increased a lot.

To begin with ,in 1918,23% people in England and Wales lived in their own houses while in the same year 77% of households lived in rented houses. In 1939 and 1953 the amount of owned houses and rented houses were the same (32% and 69% respectively).Moreover in 1961,41% of domestic units were living in their own houses and 59% people were living in rented property. While in 1971,50% households lived in owned residences, exactly same as rented houses.

Moreover, In 1981,60% households shifted in their own homes. In contrast,40% people were living in leased houses. In 1991,The amount of privately owned houses rose in 68% and the number of rented houses fell into 33%.Ten years later, in 2001,69% of households used to live in self owned houses while 31% lived in rented ones. However in 2011,The demand of possessed houses decreased in 64% and 36% of individuals started living in rented properties.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the full period and report the central shift from renting to ownership, including the equal split in 1971 and the slight reversal by 2011. Most figures are close to the chart; for example, the 1918 and 1961 values are accurate, and the 1991 rented figure of 33% is a reasonable approximation of about 32%. However, the overview is not fully precise: ownership rose through 2001, then fell in 2011, rather than simply increasing over the later period. The statement that the chart concerns “two cities” is also inaccurate; it covers England and Wales. Some details are less clearly expressed, such as “the amount of owned houses” in 1939 and 1953, where the intended comparison is difficult to follow. A sharper overview and more exact descriptions would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and chronological detail. The sequence from 1918 to 2011 makes the figures easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “In contrast” and “Ten years later” help signal comparisons and time. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some flexibility in linking ideas. However, transitions are sometimes mechanical or awkward, particularly the repeated “Moreover,” and the overview’s “while” creates a sentence fragment. Punctuation and spacing also interrupt the flow, as in “2011.The” and “Moreover, In 1981”. Use fewer, more purposeful connectors and ensure each paragraph and sentence is clearly separated to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing the chart, including “accommodation,” “rented property,” “privately owned,” and “decreased.” These choices generally communicate the trends, and the reader can understand the comparisons. There are also attempts at less common phrasing, but some expressions are inaccurate or unnatural for statistical reporting: “the demand of possessed houses decreased in 64%” and “the amount of privately owned houses rose in 68%” confuse a percentage level with a change. “Shifted in their own homes” and “self owned houses” are also awkward collocations. Prefer precise chart language such as “the proportion of households owning their homes rose to 68%” and “the share renting fell to 32%.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “while” and “whereas”-type contrasts, and the main information is usually understandable. Some sentences are grammatically controlled, such as “In 1918, 23% … lived in their own houses, while … 77% … lived in rented houses.” However, errors in sentence boundaries, punctuation, and clause construction remain. The overview begins “Overall, From…” with inconsistent capitalisation, and “while, in 1971…” is not properly attached to a complete clause. In “the same number of individuals preferred both category similarly,” the structure and agreement are faulty. Review sentence boundaries, capitalisation after commas, and singular/plural agreement; these corrections would make your varied structures more accurate.

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