Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart illustrates the data in percentage of the households in owned and rented accommodation from between the 1918 and 2011 in England and wales.

first of all, starting with the year 1981 in that year the households in owned accommodation is the lowest level from all of them which was about 23% on contrary have a look on household in rented accommodation is the highest percentage from all the year from both accommodation which was about 76%.

On the otherhand, talk about the moderate and equivalent percentage so that was in the year 1971 that shows the equal percentage in the both accommodation which was 50%.

After that have a note on the last and the lest year which was 2011 and in this year the result of percentage not much exciting but nice from the lower the percentage of owned accommodation is almost 63% and the other rented percentage is about 35%.

To summarise the all details the lowest level of owned accommodation is in the year 1918 and hiegest was in 2001 on the other side the rented accomadation higher in 1981 and lowest in 2001.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the two accommodation types and includes some relevant comparisons, such as the equal 50% shares in 1971 and the approximate 2011 figures. However, the account of the main trends is substantially inaccurate: 1981 is described as the year with the lowest ownership and highest renting, when those extremes occurred in 1918; in 1981 the figures were about 60% and 40%. The final summary also incorrectly places renting’s highest level in 1981 rather than 1918. Although it mentions the ownership peak in 2001 and the rented low in that year, it does not give a reliable overview of the overall rise and fall. Check each year against the chart and prioritise accurate key features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: the response opens by introducing the chart, then discusses selected years, and ends with a summary. Paragraph breaks also help separate these parts. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the discussion jumps from 1981 to 1971 and then 2011, without a clear chronological or comparative structure. Linking phrases such as “On the otherhand” and “After that” do not always show the relationship between the figures, and the final summary repeats earlier points rather than bringing the trends together. Group the data into a clear sequence—for example, early years, the 1971 crossover, and later years—and use accurate links to signal changes and comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “owned and rented accommodation,” “lowest level,” and “equal percentage,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are awkward or imprecise, such as “not much exciting but nice,” “have a note on,” and “the result of percentage.” Spelling and form errors, including “hiegest” and “accomadation,” also reduce clarity. Aim for concise, conventional chart language and avoid conversational evaluations. Phrases such as “the proportion of households,” “reached a peak,” and “declined to” would describe the data more precisely and naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer sentence patterns, including “To summarise the all details…” and “After that have a note…,” but most sentences rely on simple structures or are incomplete. Errors in agreement and sentence construction are frequent: “the households … is the lowest level” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “starting with the year 1981 in that year…” lacks clear punctuation and structure. Articles and prepositions are also often inaccurate, as in “from between the 1918 and 2011.” These problems sometimes make the intended comparison hard to interpret. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, consistent past-tense reporting, and punctuation between introductory phrases and main clauses.

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