Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar chart provides the information about the percentage of homes in owned and accomodation which is rented in the two states of UK, which are England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

We can see the major trends in bar chart. England and Wales are two major states for the immigrants from different countries. So, We see a major decrease in rented accomodation and a major increase in owned accomodation as the years passed on.

As we look at the bar chart, in the yaer 1918,the rented accomodation was approximately 78% as compared to owned accomodation which was hardly 22%. Then as the years passed on, the rented accomodation decreased and owned accomodation increased until the year 1971, where both were equal.

From the year 1981, the percentage of owned accomodation increased and rented accomodation decreased. Since 2011, where owned accomodation was approximately 65% and rented accomodation was about 36%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast and the broad movement: renting falls while ownership rises, and the two reach parity in 1971. The opening and final figures are also close to the chart. However, the account is only partly developed: it gives little detail about the intermediate years, and the claim that ownership increased and renting decreased “from the year 1981” misses the reversal by 2011, when ownership falls to about 64% and renting rises to about 36%. The statement about England and Wales being major destinations for immigrants is not shown by the chart and should be omitted. A fuller overview and accurate reporting of the later change would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to a general trend and then to selected years. Phrases such as “As we look at the bar chart” and “Then as the years passed on” help signal progression, but the organisation remains repetitive and the information is not grouped into clear stages. The final paragraph begins “From the year 1981” but does not explain the trend through 2001 and 2011, so the progression is incomplete. The sentence beginning “Since 2011” is also an awkward fragment, which weakens the connection to the preceding point. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and key data, and connect comparisons more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the basic trends, with relevant terms such as “percentage,” “decreased,” “increased,” and “equal.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, particularly repeated uses of “as the years passed on” and “accomodation.” “Two states of UK” is not an accurate or natural description of England and Wales, while “major states for the immigrants” introduces an unsupported idea. Use standard chart language and vary the verbs for movement and comparison. Check spelling carefully, especially “accommodation” and “year,” and choose terms that describe the data rather than adding unrelated context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer clauses, for example, “Then as the years passed on, the rented accommodation decreased and owned accommodation increased until the year 1971.” The main meaning is generally understandable, but sentence control is uneven. “Since 2011, where owned accommodation was…” is not a complete, well-formed sentence: “where” does not correctly introduce this time reference, and the clause lacks a suitable main structure. Capitalisation is inconsistent in “So, We,” and punctuation is missing after “1918.” Practise forming complete sentences when reporting dates and figures, and use accurate time clauses such as “By 2011, ownership had fallen…” alongside a wider range of controlled sentence patterns.

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