Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart illustrates the share of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, households in rented accomodation in 1918 accounted for the highest position among all, while household in owned accomodation occupied the lowest share.

To begin with, household in in rented accomodation occupied largest share in 1918 with 77%. Whereas, the lowest position in household in rented position was showed in 1991 and 2001 with 31%. The share of rented household has a similar value in 1939 and 1953 with 67%. The share considerably reduced in 1961 and 1971 with 57% and 50% respectively.

Furthermore, The highest share in household in owned accomodation was accounted in 1991 and 2001 with 67%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant figures, including rented accommodation at 77% in 1918 and the equal 50% shares in 1971. However, the response only partially summarises the main features: the overview focuses on the starting point rather than the overall opposing trends, and the owned-accommodation figures are largely omitted. The claim that ownership was highest in both 1991 and 2001 is also inaccurate: it peaked at about 69% in 2001, after reaching 68% in 1991, then fell to 64% in 2011. The response is 30 words below the required minimum, which contributes to the limited coverage. Include a fuller overview and compare the trends across the whole period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs signalled by “To begin with” and “Furthermore.” This gives the reader some guidance, and the figures are generally grouped by accommodation type. However, progression is limited because the overview does not establish the main trend, and the final paragraph contains only one sentence, leaving the ownership data underdeveloped. Some linking is mechanical or awkward: “Whereas” begins a fragment, while “Furthermore” does not introduce a developed comparison. Organise the body around the changing trends, and use complete sentences and clearer links between related figures to make the account flow more logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “share,” “accounted for,” and “reduced,” and the meaning is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are unnatural or repetitive, including “occupied the lowest share,” “highest position,” and “the share of rented household.” These choices make the description less precise, while “accomodation” is misspelled repeatedly. Use standard collocations for data, such as “accounted for the largest proportion” or “the proportion of households renting,” and check spelling carefully. More varied, accurate language for rises, falls, peaks, and comparisons would help you describe both series more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt some sentence variety, including a relative clause in “households in rented accommodation in 1918 accounted for…” and a comparison using “while.” However, control is uneven, and several sentence patterns are incomplete or awkward. “Whereas, the lowest position… was showed” is a fragment with an incorrect verb form; “To begin with, household in in rented accommodation…” contains repetition and faulty noun phrasing; and “The highest share in household… was accounted in…” has an incomplete passive construction. Capitalisation is also inconsistent after “Furthermore.” Practise complete comparative sentences and accurate passive forms, and check articles, singular/plural agreement, and punctuation before submitting.

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