Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrates the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and wales from 1918 to 2011.

Overall, the data shows that there is equal number of households in owned and rented accommodation. In 1918, there is the highest percentage, approximately 80 of households owning accommodation whereas, the lowest is in 2001 which is 32%. And, in 1971, there is a equivalent of 50% in both owned and rented housing.

In addition to this, the chart represents the number of people in owned accommodation is in ascending order while the number of households in rented is in descending order. Also, the owned housing is at the top position in 2001 and seems to have dropped by 2011.

The households doesn't remain same and keeps changing throughout the year with better accommodation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and mention the 1971 point where ownership and renting are both 50%, as well as the later fall in ownership. However, the overview is inaccurate: the figures are not generally equal, and in 1918 ownership was about 23%, not the highest figure of approximately 80%; renting was about 77%. The claim that ownership rose continuously is also incomplete, since it fell from 69% in 2001 to 64% in 2011. The final comment about “better accommodation” is unsupported by the chart. The response is also 37 words below the 150-word minimum, leaving the main trends and comparisons insufficiently reported. Select accurate key figures and explain the overall reversal in the balance between tenure types.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, an overview, and further comments on the trends. Linking phrases such as “Overall” and “In addition to this” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is weakened by repetition and by ideas that do not connect clearly: “equal number” conflicts with the later claim that ownership rises while renting falls, and “better accommodation” is not explained or supported. The overview also combines several figures without making their relationship clear. Organise the response around the overall trend, then compare the two series across the main periods, using clear references such as “the ownership rate” and “the rental rate.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant basic terms, including “percentage,” “owned and rented accommodation,” “ascending,” and “descending,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the vocabulary is limited and some choices are imprecise or repetitive. “Number of people” does not describe the chart, which reports percentages of households, while “top position” is vague for a numerical trend. “Better accommodation” introduces an unsupported judgement rather than describing the data. Use precise trend language and vary expressions for the two categories, for example “home ownership,” “rented housing,” “rose,” “remained stable,” and “declined.” Also check capitalisation in “Wales” and use natural collocations such as “the proportion of households,” rather than “the number of households” when discussing percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence forms, including a relative clause in “which is 32%” and a contrast introduced by “whereas.” However, control is uneven, and several errors affect clarity. For example, “there is equal number” needs an article and a plural noun (“there are equal proportions”); “there is a equivalent” has incorrect article use; and “The households doesn't remain same” has agreement and article errors. Tense use also shifts between present and past when describing historical data (“there is” and “was”). Sentence boundaries and punctuation are sometimes awkward, particularly in “In 1918, there is the highest percentage … whereas, the lowest is in 2001.” Practise accurate past-tense comparisons and simpler, complete sentences before adding more complex structures.

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