Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Overall, there ae two comparisons between the households in owned and rented accommodation in England nd Wales from 1918 to 2011. In the begging the ratio of rented are higher where the ratio of rented are low in 2001, where as the owned accommodation are high in 2001 and lower cn 1918.

In 1918 the rented households around 78% while the 22% are owned.After few year in 1939 the owned increased to 32% while the rented fall at 32%. In 1953 the both acccommodation are remain same, In 1961 the owned rose at 41% while the rented down at 59%. In 1971 the both acccommodation at 50%.

Afteralll in 1981, the owned households up to 60% where as the rented at 40%. In 1991 the owned incresed at 68% where the rented at 32%. The owned minor up at 69%, where the rented minor down at 31% in 2001. At the end in 2011 owned household ratio down at 63% while the rented up to 35%.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the full period and report the main shift from renting being more common at the start to ownership becoming more common later. The figures for 1918, 1961, 1971, and 2001 are broadly consistent with the chart, and you note the peak in ownership around 2001. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: it says rented accommodation is “low in 2001” without clearly summarising the overall crossover, and the final figures are given as 63% and 35% rather than approximately 64% and 36%. The statement that both categories were 32% in 1939 is also incorrect; they were 32% owned and 68% rented. Make the overview more precise and check comparisons against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and chronological details grouped into paragraphs. Time markers such as “In 1918,” “In 1961,” and “At the end” help readers follow the sequence. However, progression is weakened by unclear or repetitive linking, including “Overall, there ae two comparisons” and repeated use of “while” and “where as.” Some sentences combine several years and comparisons without clear punctuation, making relationships difficult to follow. The overview also does not clearly guide the detailed paragraphs. Organise the body into clear stages—early years, the crossover, and later years—and use accurate, varied links to show contrast and change.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “households,” “increased,” “rose,” and “fall,” so the reader can identify the subject and general trends. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “the ratio of rented,” “owned household ratio,” and “minor up.” These expressions are not natural ways to describe proportions in a chart. Spelling errors such as “begging,” “incresed,” and “Afteralll” are noticeable, while repeated use of “up” and “down” limits precision. Build a more accurate set of terms for proportions and trends, such as “share,” “proportion,” “declined,” and “reached a peak,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, for example, “In 1961 the owned rose at 41% while the rented down at 59%.” This shows an effort to connect related information, but the sentence contains problems with verb forms and sentence structure. Other examples include “the both accommodation are remain same” and “the owned households up to 60%,” where verbs are missing or incorrectly formed. Articles, agreement, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “After few year” and “owned.After.” These errors sometimes make the intended comparison harder to understand. Practise complete subject–verb sentences in the past tense, and use a reliable pattern such as “The proportion of owner-occupied homes rose to 60%, while renting fell to 40%.”

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