Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is thought that these days the public have too many choices. I completely agree with this belief, with the rapid development of technology inidivduals face a lot of choices.

On the one hand, technology is rapidly developing since the birth of smartphones, people are provided with choices that make up their daily lives. That is to say, when a person wakes up every morning they have the tendency to choose whether to do things that can benefit them in the future or to doom-scroll on social medias. For instance, around the world teenagers are exposed to certain social medias such as Tiktok, Facebook and Instagram. They post themselves to achieve reactions, which causes a surge of dopamine. As a result, I believe that technology contributes to the daily life choices of the public.

Speaking of technology, it can also provides merit of choices such as the ability to order food, face-time loved one's and accessibility to essential resources from the internet. Despite the influence of techonology with it's extensive choices, it still provides benefits to the public which can possibly improve the daily lives of the people. For example, immigrants use social networks to communicate to their family, as they feel isolated from everybody because of language barriers and cultural differences. Therefore, I believe that as people are face with a lot of choices because of technology, it still offers advantages.

In conclusion, technology being one of the contributing factor to the choices of people, it provides detrimental and positive effect to their daily lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I completely agree,” and you discuss how technology creates choices in everyday life, supporting this with examples about social media and immigrants communicating with family. These points are relevant, but the response only partly develops the question of whether people have too many choices. Much of the discussion shifts to technology’s benefits and drawbacks rather than explaining why the number of choices is excessive or how it affects people. The conclusion also says technology has both “detrimental and positive effect” without resolving how this supports your complete agreement. Develop the consequences of choice overload and connect each example more directly to your position; also make the conclusion’s judgement consistent with the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “For instance” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main sections. However, progression within the body paragraphs is sometimes unclear. The first paragraph moves from daily choices to teenagers’ social-media use, then to dopamine, without fully explaining the link to having too many choices. The second paragraph begins “Speaking of technology” but shifts from its disadvantages to its benefits, so the relationship between the two sides is not clearly controlled. Some linking phrases, including “Therefore” and “As a result,” repeat conclusions rather than advance the reasoning. Organise each paragraph around one claim, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “rapid development,” “doom-scroll,” “surge of dopamine,” “isolated” and “language barriers.” These choices show an attempt to discuss technology and its effects with some specificity. However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “provides merit of choices,” “post themselves to achieve reactions” and “accessibility to essential resources.” There are also spelling errors in “inidivduals,” “techonology” and “Tiktok,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural phrasing and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe technology as “offering a wider range of options,” and say that users “post content to attract reactions.” This would make your meaning more precise without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “when,” “which” and “as,” and most of your meaning remains understandable. However, errors in sentence structure and agreement recur. The opening body sentence joins two independent clauses with a comma: “technology is rapidly developing since the birth of smartphones, people are provided with choices.” In “it can also provides,” the verb form is incorrect, while “people are face with” and “one of the contributing factor” show problems with verb form and agreement. The final sentence, “technology being one of the contributing factor …, it provides,” is also structurally awkward. Practise separating complete clauses with a full stop or conjunction, and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms when editing.

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