Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, technological advancement plays an important role in making different kinds of products and those are easily available to the people. This essay agrees with the statement because at present people have so many options and they are easy to find both online and offline.

People often become confused while they have to buy something due to the existence of various products in the market. This is particularly important when people want to buy a specific product such as shoes. There are number of shoes exist in the market that people may fail to decide which one will be perfect for them. For intance, I went to a shop to buy shoe for me, there different types of shoe with variety colour. Whenever i saw the new colour I liked the new one. At the end, I was struggling to decide which one i should buy and I did not buy anything.

Online facilities have created more easy way to see options. At present, people tend to do more online shopping than offline. There are number of online pages are available in social media plat and websites. If anyone wants buy something and search in facebook, the algorithem will make sure that you will see all the advertisement related to your selected products. For example, my mother wanted to buy a new tablecloth, so she searched on facebook and after that her entire facebook feed filled with tablecloth advertisements. After watching so many videos she odered one.

In conclusion, both online and offline shopping have numerous options or choises in todays world. As a result people often become indecisive when shopping due to choise overload.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: you agree that people now have many choices, and the conclusion restates this view. Both body paragraphs give relevant support, using shoe shopping and your mother’s experience with online advertisements to illustrate how choice can lead to indecision. This addresses the question effectively. However, the discussion focuses almost entirely on shopping, and some points are not fully explained. For instance, you mention that people may fail to choose suitable shoes, but could explain more clearly why a wider range makes decision-making harder or what consequences this has. The online example shows exposure to many adverts, but its link to having “too many” choices could be developed further. More explanation and a broader supporting point would make the argument more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs with distinct examples, and a conclusion. The progression from choices in physical shops to online shopping is logical, and phrases such as “For example” help signal supporting evidence. The conclusion also returns to the central idea of indecision. Some connections are less smooth, however. The opening sentence of the second body paragraph, “Online facilities have created more easy way to see options,” does not clearly bridge from the previous example, and several sentences repeat the idea of numerous products or advertisements without adding a new step to the argument. Use more precise referencing and transitions to show how each example supports the claim, and organise each paragraph around a clear point followed by explanation and evidence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “options,” “products,” “advertisement,” and “indecisive,” and the phrase “choice overload” gives the conclusion a useful summary. There is some attempt to use more specific language, but the range and control are uneven. Several expressions are awkward or imprecise, such as “technological advancement plays an important role in making different kinds of products” and “online facilities,” which make the intended meaning less natural. Spelling errors such as “intance,” “algorithem,” “odered,” and “choises” are noticeable, as are repeated basic terms like “buy” and “different.” Build a wider set of accurate collocations for shopping and decision-making, and proofread spelling so your vocabulary communicates ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some attempts at complex structures, including “because at present people have so many options” and the conditional “If anyone wants buy something and search in facebook…”. The overall meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity and control. Examples include “There are number of shoes exist,” which combines incompatible structures, and “there different types of shoe,” which is missing a verb. Other issues include “people tend to do more online shopping than offline” and “her entire facebook feed filled,” where the sentence patterns are incomplete or need clearer grammatical forms. Articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate clauses before adding complexity, and check each sentence for a subject, a correctly formed verb, and complete punctuation.

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