Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays , Few individuals believe that we have too many choices in different areas in life . For example , education , jobs have too many choices in and create too many confusions . I partly agree with statement because too many options can create confusions . Too many choices can have both possitive and nagetive effects . On the one hand , too many choices in different ways people do not choose their relevent choice because , when students complete their education so , Universities and colleges introduce many subjects and courses so, they can create many confusions of students . For example , A student clear their intermediate in medical field and they saw more option in universities courses when he confused and they choose wrong course in graduation . On the one hand , its too many advantages i agree with this statement . People can select option according to their needs . For example , if people improve their skills and they do work hard in any field but they get earn small amount of salary then they leave the job and choose any fields where they earn better salary . Moreover , there are some possible ways to improve the situation . The government , companies and society work together and play also role by providing responsible decisions . For instance , Simple rules and better awareness can help people make better choices . In my knowledge , Today we have many choices and they have many advantages because they create many confusions of people . By concluding , Many choices is an important topic and should not be ignored . if people and society work together they should reduce the nagetive effects .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a partly agreeing position and address both the possible disadvantages and advantages of having many choices. The education example—where a student becomes confused by university courses and selects the wrong one—supports the concern about overload, while the job example shows how options may help someone seek better pay. However, the position is not consistently expressed: the opening says “I partly agree,” but later you write “its too many advantages i agree,” which makes your view difficult to follow. The discussion of government, companies and society is only loosely connected to the question and is not developed. To strengthen the response, explain more clearly when choice becomes excessive and develop each example to show why it supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “On the one hand” and “Moreover” show an attempt to organise ideas. However, the overall progression is unclear: both main paragraphs begin “On the one hand,” although they present contrasting points, and the shift to government action is not clearly linked to the argument. Some connections are difficult to follow, particularly “In my knowledge” and the final sentence, which repeats the idea of advantages and confusion without resolving the position. Use one paragraph for disadvantages and another for advantages, with accurate contrast markers, then make the conclusion restate your view consistently. Clearer links between each example and its main point would also improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “choices,” “Universities and colleges,” “courses,” “skills” and “salary,” so the reader can identify the subject of your examples. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “too many confusions,” “relevent choice,” “nagetive effects” and “they get earn small amount of salary.” Some key words, especially “choices” and “confusions,” are repeated rather than replaced with precise alternatives. Build a small set of accurate expressions for discussing decision-making and consequences, and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and examples, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. For instance, “when students complete their education so, Universities and colleges introduce many subjects” combines clauses incorrectly, while “if people improve their skills and they do work hard … then they leave the job” has an unstable conditional structure. There are also recurring problems with agreement, articles and sentence boundaries, as in “Many choices is an important topic” and “if people and society work together they should reduce.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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