Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

People do have so many choices in todays time,due to so many factors such as, technological advancement,developement of Ai and many medical factors are also included because in that area we also witnessed a huge advancement and knowledge.

Nowadays,we find knowledge and information of so many different things from so many people.People have lived through a generation and did quite a lot in their times making us have so many choices to take in life. I strongly agree to this statement because i myself have witnessed alot of choices to make even if its for my career a friendship or family matters,there is just a lot to intake a process.For example a friend of mine did a degree in the career of pharmacy he had so many option because in todays time you can travel abroad to have much more opportuniities and he did went abroad which got him from a career in pharmacy to having his own chain in the pharmaceutical industry,he became a supplier.

We do have alot of choices to make but choosing the right ones matter.At the right time the choices made can take you to places.People witness the best of life from the choices they make in their lives,so choices is like a part of a persons life.Having to say that we have to many choices is the factor which is good for us we just have to take full advantage of the choices we choose to make and try to make the best out of it so it can be worth our while.

In conclusion,we have too many choices to make we should try and make the right ones to end up where we want.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that people now have many choices, and you give relevant examples from career decisions and your friend’s move from pharmacy into the pharmaceutical industry. You also acknowledge that choices can be beneficial when made well. However, the response only partly develops the question of whether there are *too many* choices. Much of the discussion explains that choices are useful, rather than examining when their abundance may create difficulty or pressure. The personal example is relevant but its connection to having too many options could be made more explicit. To strengthen the response, explain the effects of excessive choice and develop a second supporting reason, while keeping your position clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening position, supporting discussion and a conclusion. The career example gives the reader a concrete point to follow, and phrases such as “For example” and “In conclusion” signal stages of the response. However, progression is limited: the second paragraph moves from general comments about information and generations to personal choices and then to the friend’s story without clearly linking each point. The final body paragraph repeats the idea that choices are beneficial rather than adding a distinct supporting point. Some long sentences also make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Organise the body around separate reasons, use clearer links between claims and examples, and avoid repeating the same conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “technological advancement,” “opportunities,” “career,” and “pharmaceutical industry,” and the example shows an attempt to use more specific language. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “choices,” “people,” and “life,” and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, including “a lot to intake a process” and “choices to take in life.” Spelling errors such as “todays,” “developement,” and “opportuniities” are noticeable, while “Ai” is not presented in standard form. These issues sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing options, decision-making and their consequences, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a reason introduced by “because” and a relative clause in “a friend of mine did a degree…”. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “he did went abroad” uses an incorrect verb form, while “choices is like a part” has a subject–verb agreement error. The opening sentence also has unclear sentence boundaries and punctuation, and several clauses run together. There are some understandable sentences, but the range of structures remains limited and accuracy is inconsistent. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurate subordinate clauses; check verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation during revision.

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