Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few individual thought at the current we have many options . I strongly agreed to this statement as impact of social media and awarness because of education speacially in adulthoods every one knows what to do .

On the one hand , technology plays a very curcial role in our lives as it makes our work easier, smater and convient . But we were totally dependent on internet everyone has easily assess to social media whether for any purpose like , shopping food , education ,games we have alot of varites that results in our choices as well when we had alot things in front of us then automatic our collection of selecting something confused somethime maybe but it quite helpful as well . For example , the trend of going to abroad incrreased rapidly everyone want to explore and achieved different targets because now we had alot of options .

On the other hand , as now a days everything update in the field of technolology , education , health ,food , in contrast to past many things was changed now . That the reason parents espeacially awared allowed there childrens wahts they want gave permission to choose there own field choice moreover, to do anything they acutuallly want to do . For example the trend of education in forigens studies rose which aware many youngsters in many choices as well as in chooising right dission . When we got the chance to exploure the world then in front of us many options were avilable so , it results in varing choices to each other .

But apart, some thought giving libirity in varities it results in spooling our adults and our society as well . Nevertheless, acording to my prospective choices were good in selecting something usefull

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear general position in the opening—“I strongly agreed”—and discuss how technology and education have expanded people’s options. Examples such as social media, studying abroad, and parents allowing children to choose their own fields are relevant to the topic. However, the response only partially develops the question of whether there are *too many* choices: much of the essay explains that options have increased or can be helpful, while the possible drawbacks are mentioned briefly and not explained. The final sentence also says choices are “good” without resolving how far you agree that there are too many. Develop a consistent position and explain the effects of excess choice, such as confusion or difficulty making decisions, with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two main body paragraphs, and a concluding comment, so there is some organisation. The contrast signposts “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help indicate a change of focus. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into long sentences, and the relationship between them is not always clear. For instance, the first body paragraph moves from technology making work easier to dependence on the internet, then to shopping and studying abroad, without clearly connecting these points to the claim that choices are excessive. The final paragraph introduces a concern about society but does not develop it. Use one main idea per paragraph, clearer topic sentences, and more precise links between examples and your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “dependent on internet,” “explore,” “permission,” and “choices,” and you use some relevant terms connected with technology, education, and society. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the message difficult to understand, such as “smater,” “varites,” “incrreased,” and “spooling.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “our collection of selecting something” and “varying choices to each other.” Aim to use accurate, natural collocations rather than adding more ambitious words: for example, explain that a large number of options can “make decision-making difficult.” Proofread spelling carefully and choose vocabulary that expresses the intended relationship between ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “as,” “when,” and “because.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty; frequent errors sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. Examples include “Few individual thought,” “everyone has easily assess,” and “many things was changed,” where agreement and verb forms are incorrect. Tense shifts also occur, as in “we had” when discussing present-day options, and sentence boundaries are unclear in passages such as “we have alot of varites that results in our choices as well when we had alot things in front of us.” Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and consistent tense, then combine ideas with accurate subordinate clauses and punctuation.

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