Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, individual assume that we have a lot of choices. I firmly believe with this statement because everyone has a different mindset of thinking according to age and independent to their lifes in term of decision making. This essay will discuss these above points with solid reasons and examples.
Firstly, citizens have a lot of option in this century beacuse of their separate intelluctual ability by their age groups. Adults, teenagers, younger generations and elderly people have their own choice of whatever they like or dislike. individual belongs to any age group, totally different choices and prefrences in their lifestyle. To examplify this, someone who belong to age group 15 might like the chocolates and candies more than a person who prefer coffee and tea at his 70s. so, different kind of thinking appeared during the selection of something such as food, fashion and traveling.
Secondly, in this era, multiple choices depend everyone is independent to make decisions about their lifes. Crucial decision making regarding to their selection of career, personal life and taking risk to start a new venture. For instance, a engineer may faced difficulties to select the caree pathor start Enterprenurship, which is told by their parents but the person take the path whatever him likes. Consequently, engineer might became successful due to the indendence of the descison making and start to support his family financialy.
In conclusion, different kind of choices is totally fine, which is driven by seperate thinking mindset and independency of decsion making by everyone.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
Your position is clear: you agree that people have many choices, and you give two reasons—differences between age groups and personal independence in decision-making. The examples about food preferences and an engineer choosing between a career path and entrepreneurship are relevant. However, the response only partly develops the task: it does not explain in much detail why the number of choices is excessive or what effects this has, and the first reason focuses more on different preferences than on the availability of choices. The introduction promises “solid reasons and examples,” but the ideas remain broad. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of having many options and develop each example to show how it supports your position.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. This makes the main line of argument easy to follow. However, some connections between ideas are mechanical or unclear. For example, “multiple choices depend everyone is independent” does not clearly express the relationship between choice and independence, while “Consequently” introduces an outcome that is not fully explained. The first body paragraph also moves from age groups to food, fashion, and travel without developing those examples in a clear sequence. Use linking phrases that show the precise relationship between claims and examples, and make sure each paragraph progresses from a clear point to explanation and support.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “decision making,” “career,” “personal life,” and “independent,” and you attempt more formal expressions such as “Crucial decision making.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “separate intelluctual ability,” “different kind of thinking appeared,” and “support his family financialy.” There are also repeated references to “choices” and “decision making,” with few precise alternatives. Build a more accurate range for discussing options and their effects, and check spelling and natural word combinations. For instance, describe people as having “different preferences” rather than “separate intellectual ability.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a relative clause in “someone who belong to age group 15.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction can make the meaning unclear. For example, “individual assume” needs a plural or singular form used consistently, “a engineer may faced” has article and verb-form errors, and “the person take the path whatever him likes” is not grammatically controlled. Some sentences are also fragments, such as “Crucial decision making regarding to their selection of career…” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, tense, and articles.
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