Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

At Present, most people believe that currently they have many other choices. In this essay, i will cover both sides of the essay before giving my opinon.

Some People talk about that as the time passes, the new oppurtunities occur. We have alot of choices that we can make in this time as compared to the past. Through new choices, we can decide whatever we want rather than, if we go back in the decades, people were limited in the choices, they can't choose what they want or not because on that time they are sheep group. Like where other people go they go behind them.

On the other hand, people say that new choices make us disturbing. Because sometimes it is difficult to choose. They don't know where to go which choice is right for us. The choice which we are choosing will help us in the future or not. However, the previous time which is gone, things are stable. People are not worried about to choose because there are few things that need to your decision which you want to select or which not.

I strongly believe that, nowadays we have alot choices. As we know that, limited choices make our mind limited, we can't build our mind for things.Too many options, make us confident and no fear about our decision that what to choose, which choice is right or wrong for us. This makes no complications. Which we have to do right now is that to open our mind and avail these options.

In the last, i would say in the future most people change their minds as some people struggles to select or some people are welcome these options.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that you agree people have many choices, and you acknowledge the opposing concern that choosing can be difficult. The comparison with the past and the point that options may broaden people’s thinking are relevant to the question. However, the discussion remains general: the claim that people in the past were “sheep group” is unclear and unsupported, while the benefits of choice are asserted rather than illustrated with a specific example. The introduction promises to cover “both sides,” but the final paragraph introduces a somewhat different idea about people changing their minds. Develop each main reason with a clear explanation or example, and keep the conclusion focused on your stated position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a concluding paragraph. Transitions such as “On the other hand” and “I strongly believe” help signal the direction of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the discussion of past generations being a “sheep group” does not clearly connect to the point about choice, and the final paragraph’s reference to people changing their minds is not fully prepared for. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “the choice which we are choosing” are repetitive rather than clarifying. Make each paragraph develop one central point in a logical sequence, and use clearer links between claims and explanations.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “opportunities,” “limited,” “decision,” and “options,” and the reader can generally understand your main position. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making ideas unclear. For example, “people are sheep group” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “make us disturbing” appears to mean that choices cause difficulty or anxiety. There are also spelling and form errors such as “opputunities,” “opinon,” and “alot.” Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing choice, consequences, and decision-making, and check spelling and collocations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “On the other hand” and a conditional-style comparison with the past. However, complex attempts are often faulty, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation can make the reader work to understand the meaning. For instance, “people were limited in the choices, they can't choose” joins clauses incorrectly and shifts tense, while “the previous time which is gone, things are stable” has an unclear structure. Capitalisation of “i” and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses only when their relationship is clear.

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