Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Ever since the dawn of the history, in today's world, some folk think that we have huge amount of selections in each and every sectors. I strongly agree to the given statement. My inclination is justified in the forth-coming paragraphs.

To begin with, we have to many choices in every sectors which offers a high quality services. First and fore-most reason is that education provides a several types of paths in every stream. To epitomize, After completing our 10th and 12th we have many selection for education like commerce, science and so on that we have to decide which will better for our future. Moreover, online shopping provides a huge amount of selection which is not only give clothes information but it also offers selection of every section. For Instance, we have too many choice for clothes then we have to decide which is suitable, affordable and comfortable for our self.

Add fuel to the fires, very well-known website instagram and youtube provides a endless reels ,entertainment videos as well as information about the world. Give the classic example, people watch the movies and web-series about their preferences and choices. Last but not the least, tourism sector play a vital role in masses lives because travelling make people lives more intresting and stress free which is provides a huge amount of places for visiting.

Hammering the last nail of this topic, we have too many choices which is offers to select thing by their preferences or intrests. consequently, huge amount of selection make our lives convenient ,reduce time as well as satisfied.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I strongly agree,” and the response stays focused on the idea that people face many choices. You support this with relevant areas—education, online shopping, entertainment and tourism—and give examples such as choosing a school stream or selecting clothes. This addresses the task, but the support is uneven: the education and shopping examples are explained briefly, while the points about social media and tourism are mostly asserted rather than showing how these choices affect people. The conclusion also introduces benefits such as convenience and saving time, which are not reconciled with the claim that there are “too many” choices. Develop the consequences of having excessive choice and clarify your position on its drawbacks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Ideas are grouped by topic, and signposts such as “To begin with” and “Moreover” help readers follow the examples. However, some linking phrases feel mechanical or do not express the relationship between ideas accurately. “Add fuel to the fires” does not clearly introduce the next point, and “Hammering the last nail of this topic” is an awkward way to signal a conclusion. The final paragraph also shifts to saying choices make life convenient without connecting this to the argument about having too many choices. Use simpler, more precise transitions and make each paragraph build on the central argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “inclination,” “epitomize,” “preferences” and “vital role,” and the examples make your meaning generally understandable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “huge amount of selections” would be more naturally expressed as “a wide range of options,” while “Add fuel to the fires” is not an appropriate transition here. There are also spelling errors, including “fore-most,” “intrests” and “intresting,” and some repeated use of “choices,” “selection” and “provides.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than inserting formal-sounding phrases, and vary key terms with suitable alternatives such as “options” or “alternatives.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, for example the sentence beginning “For Instance” that explains the clothing choices. Some sentence patterns communicate the main ideas, but errors in agreement, articles, plurals and verb forms occur across the response. Examples include “we have to many choices in every sectors,” “education provides a several types,” and “tourism sector play.” The sentence “which is not only give clothes information” also shows difficulty forming a parallel clause. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the overall meaning remains recoverable. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and article use, and build complex sentences from shorter, correct clauses before adding subordinate structures.

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