Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argued that some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices in everything yes i agree, from this view and lets i will summarise this statement.

Nowadays we have too many choices in everything for example, if we want to go to gujrat so we many routes which are go to gujrat not one route we have some routes if we go at a mobile shop there are many choices of mobile we have, if we go at a fabrics shop and we want to bought clothes there are we have many choices of clothes we have. Nowadays we have many choices in everything for example, we want to go abroad so there are many countries for us not one country.

Secondly if we go at a fruit stall there are many types of fruits for example, Aplle Banana Orange and many types of fruits so that is our choice that which type of fruits we want to bought, if i go at shoes shop, there are many types of shoes at the shop for example, Grippers Spikes and there are many types of sendals so there are also our choice that which type of shoes and sendals we want to bought.

I firmly believe that nowadays some people have many choices in boughting shoes clothes shoes mobiles transport fruits bikes cars things related sports etc. So in everything we have many choices to going to boughting to eating to riding to travel to read to watch.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“yes i agree”—and give relevant everyday examples, including routes to Gujarat, mobile phones, clothes, fruit and shoes. These examples show that you understand the topic, but they mostly repeat the same point rather than explain why having many options is excessive or what effects it has. The conclusion lists more areas of choice without developing your reasoning, so the response addresses the question only minimally. The response also contains 241 words, which is 9 words below the required minimum; the 10 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen your answer, explain the consequences of choice, such as difficulty deciding, and develop one or two examples with clear reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding statement. “Secondly” signals a new example, and the repeated references to everyday choices help the reader recognise the central topic. However, ideas are not arranged into a clear line of argument: the examples are presented as a list, with little explanation connecting them to the claim that there are too many choices. Repetition, especially “many choices in everything,” also limits progression, while the opening sentence is difficult to follow. Organise the body around distinct reasons or effects, use topic sentences to guide each paragraph, and connect examples to the point they support rather than simply adding more examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “routes,” “countries,” “fruits,” “shoes” and “mobiles,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is repetitive, with “many choices” and “types” used repeatedly instead of more precise expressions. Several word choices and forms are inaccurate, such as “boughting,” “sendals,” and “fabrics shop,” and “Grippers” may not clearly communicate the intended type of footwear. These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the examples. Build a wider set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for instance, describe “a wide range of options” and explain that choices can “make decisions more difficult.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences rely on simple patterns, often joining several ideas with “and” or repeating “there are,” so the range of sentence structures is limited. Errors in sentence formation and grammatical patterns are frequent: “if we want to go to gujrat so we many routes” lacks a complete, correctly linked clause, and “which type of fruits we want to bought” uses an incorrect verb form. Articles, prepositions and punctuation are also inconsistently controlled, as in “at a mobile shop” and the long, comma-linked examples. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex forms with “because,” “although” or “which,” checking verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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