Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is a growing debate about in recent days we have multiplt choices. I strongly agree with the view becuse we have multiple choices like freelancing job or phsyical jobs and online or traditional physical classes.

One reason is we have choices for the modes of job such as freelancing, work from home or full time job. Although in early days we have to go to offices , now a days we have option of doing work from home or do freelancing which will beneficial for both, save time of daily commuters and save office expences. For example, work from home save time of commuter by which they complete their work early also save offices expences like electricity bills. As a result, it is choice of work from home whih leads to ;less mental stress and more opportunities.

Another reason is students have many choices for study such as online , offline , pre-recorded lectures. That offers students to study with less expense, if they want to study abroad and have not enough money for accomodation they learn through online classes. For example, a student wants to study in tum university he choose online classes by this he saves living expense while study in his dream university. As a result, students can learn from their desire institute without spending extra block account or living expense and gain better future opportunitiers.

In conlcusion, there are many choices for every one whether a working employee or a student. I agree with view the we having mutiple choices in our lives

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction (“I strongly agree”) and conclusion, and you give two relevant areas in which choices have increased: employment arrangements and study formats. The examples of working from home and taking online classes help connect these points to practical benefits. However, the response mainly explains why having choices is useful, rather than fully examining the claim that there are “too many” choices. The job paragraph focuses on savings and reduced stress, while the education paragraph gives a hypothetical student example; neither considers possible drawbacks or explains when choice becomes excessive. To develop the response further, address this distinction directly and extend at least one example with a clearer explanation of how the range of options affects people.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. Topic sentences such as “One reason” and “Another reason” make the progression easy to follow, and examples generally appear in the relevant paragraph. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical, however, because “For example” and “As a result” are used in similar ways in both body paragraphs. Some links between ideas are also unclear, particularly the move from work-from-home savings to “more opportunities,” and the final sentence repeats the main position without adding a concluding insight. Use a wider range of linking methods and make the cause-and-effect relationship between each example and its main point more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “freelancing,” “work from home,” “pre-recorded lectures,” and “living expense.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make the writing less precise. Examples include “physical jobs” where “office-based work” may be intended, “office expences,” “desire institute,” and “better future opportunitiers.” Repetition of “choices,” “save,” and “expense” also limits flexibility. Build a more accurate set of expressions for employment and education, and check spelling and natural word combinations. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish the availability of options from their benefits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a concession beginning “Although” and conditional phrasing such as “if they want to study abroad.” The main ideas are usually understandable, but some errors in sentence structure, verb forms, articles, and punctuation reduce accuracy. For example, “which will beneficial” needs a verb form such as “which will be beneficial,” and “work from home save time” needs subject–verb agreement (“saves”). The sentence beginning “That offers students…” is awkwardly joined to the following clause, while the final sentence, “I agree with view the we having…,” is not grammatically complete. Practise forming complete clauses and checking agreement and articles, while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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