Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
In today's world, many individuals are surrounded by the variety of choices in almost every situation of their life, from shopping, education to career path and entertainment. I strongly agree that wide range of choices are available in today's generation and this is very beneficial for many individuals to find products and opportunities in life.
First and foremost, the major advantage of having more choices is that consumer can select their products on the basis of their preferences, budgets and product quality. Like "online shopping" offers thousands of products at different price range and different product quality so that customer can compare its quality, price and rating or reviews and choose product wisely before purchasing it. As result businesses are encouraged to enhance their goods and services
Furthermore, the increasing number of educational and career opportunities has more option for an individual, students can choose their favorite universities with various stream of education and international training programs along with that some of them are also providing "online courses" so students can choose according to their interest and financial situation. Similarly, working professionals now have access to wide range of career path including remote jobs and freelancing, these options provide more flexibility to for their work.
However, it is true that sometimes to many choices can make people confuse to make decision for choosing one option, for example, selecting a "mobile phone" because of large number of varieties are available. so sometimes people use to do some research about that product or service and finding another alternative and compare it and then they can make decisions. Therefore, the benefits of having multiple choices clearly outweigh the disadvantages.
In conclusion, although an excessive number of options are available and sometimes it is difficult for decision making, the advantage far overweight the disadvantage that sometimes people have benefits of having different choices, they promote competition, improve quality, and enable people to make decisions and choose product according to their need.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, clearly stating a position in the introduction and maintaining it throughout. The ideas are relevant and supported by examples, such as online shopping and educational opportunities. However, the development of the counter-argument regarding the 'paradox of choice' is slightly superficial. While the essay acknowledges that too many choices can cause confusion, it could have been strengthened by discussing the psychological impact or the 'analysis paralysis' phenomenon in more depth. Overall, the position is clear, and the main ideas are well-supported, meeting the requirements for a Band 7.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the advantages and the counter-argument. Cohesive devices such as 'First and foremost', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader. However, there are some instances where the flow is slightly mechanical, and some referencing is a bit repetitive. For example, the transition between the discussion of consumer products and the conclusion could be smoother. Despite these minor issues, the logical flow is consistent and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task. You use some topic-specific terms like 'freelancing', 'remote jobs', and 'educational opportunities'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'wide range of choices are available' (should be 'is available') and 'the advantage far overweight the disadvantage' (should be 'outweighs'). While you attempt to use a range of vocabulary, the lack of more sophisticated or precise academic collocations limits the score to a Band 6. Improving your control over word forms and collocations will help elevate this score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully use complex sentences, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues like 'consumer can select' (should be 'consumers can select') and 'too many choices can make people confuse' (should be 'confused'). Additionally, there are some punctuation and article errors, such as 'in today's generation' and 'to many choices'. These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage would be beneficial.
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