Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The world is full of choices and universe had blessed people with variety of options to choose for. Back from history to the present time, there are multiple choices for a person to make in there life, whether it is related to their career or any other perspective. Liberty is not only up to this stream but also offered in varied sectors, coming to living options, selection of the mates and so on. Therefore, it can be believed that people have diverse choices in their lifetime.
Talking about career, after completing the secondary and higher secondary education, a student comes through preferences to pick for, as a fish has when it dives deep in the ocean for the search of food. It completely depends on the learner, which field it selects to learn. To exemplify, after completion of secondary education, individual have wide number of choices for the selection of new program and they also come through more number of courses once they end up with what they where learning. So, agreeing to the claim that people have too many choices can be appropriate.
Furthermore, a individual has the right to choose the place or location, they want to live in. Also, humans are free to select the specified nature and area they want to thrive. Sometimes true freedoms are is not having different choices - it rather comes from the choices you make. Even though, the real joy and freedom lies when one is happy with their choices and this is why it is important to have various choices.
To conclude, I agree to the statement that people have various choices to
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, but the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention career and location choices, the arguments lack depth and specific, real-world examples. The essay ends abruptly, which prevents a full conclusion and leaves the final argument incomplete. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph provides a clear, well-supported point that directly relates to the 'too many choices' debate. The current structure feels a bit repetitive, focusing more on the existence of choices rather than evaluating whether having 'too many' is a positive or negative phenomenon.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is sometimes mechanical. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'To conclude', but the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is abrupt. Additionally, the final sentence is incomplete, which disrupts the overall coherence of the piece. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'multiple choices' and 'variety of options'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'universe had blessed people' and 'coming to living options'. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'autonomy', 'decision fatigue', or 'abundance of alternatives', and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'in there life' (their), 'a individual' (an), and 'what they where learning' (were). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'individual have wide number of choices'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors limits the score. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article placement to improve your accuracy.
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