Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some individuals thinks that today generation have multiple choices rather than older generations. I totally agree with this statement, because the global turn around digitally and people have choices on educational and career field.
One of the main benefit of having several choices in educational is that people can easily choose whatever they are passionate. If they choose what they liked then they push themselves through their limit which assist them to make successful in their own field. For example, most of the musicians who sacrifies their study and joint the music classes are now famous and being success in music industry.
Another one, which shows nowadays people have many opportunities foe their career. Many peoples choose whatever they wanted because in modern world everything is evolved and everything needs are equally which is better for the skill worker who is good on their work. Lots of infrastructure and factories are open which gives a employeement to their citizens which helps to build a growth of country in economically. For example, most of the developed countries, provide the part time job to their citizens or immigrant people which helps to earn some money and they can easily start their own start-up which was their dream to open.
In conclusion, modern people have many choices in several field but, the main is the educational and career filed which helps to choose their lifestyle by their own choice. Lastly one thing, if they choose their field by their choice then they can get success in their field.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by agreeing that there are too many choices today, focusing on education and career. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that choices help people push their limits, the explanation is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. The examples provided, such as musicians sacrificing studies, are relevant but could be more clearly linked to the central argument of 'too many choices' versus 'having opportunities'. The position is clear, but the argument would benefit from more nuanced exploration of why having 'too many' choices might be a negative or positive phenomenon.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Another one, which shows...' is an awkward transition. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'everything needs are equally', which makes the logical progression difficult to follow. While there is a clear introduction and conclusion, the internal flow between sentences within paragraphs is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and imprecise linking words.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'global turn around digitally' instead of 'digital transformation' and 'make successful' instead of 'become successful'. You also use 'employeement' (spelling error) and 'sacrifies' (spelling error). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of control over word forms and collocations limits the score. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring correct word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'Some individuals thinks' and 'today generation have'. Articles are often missing or misused, and there are errors in pluralization, such as 'many peoples'. Punctuation is generally functional, but the high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the text makes it difficult for the reader to follow the argument smoothly. A greater focus on basic grammatical accuracy is required.
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