Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
overchoice is verry common in now days due easy to excess online shopping applications and websites. therefor some people believe that in the 21st century people have more choice in every area if it is clothing, food, or, technology. I fully agree with this given statement.
To begin with in the 21st century the technology is so advanced and there are so many online delivery applications, websites are available that people can buy whatever they want from this online shopping applications. nowadays this trend is increased so much that even there are food delivery application also are available; people just have to give the application list of menus and the delivery arrived at your doorstep in just 15 or 20 minutes. not only in the food delivery but also in the home remedies items are also available on the online such as shoes, kitchen items, gym equipment, smart phones, any other electronic items are also available at this online platform and also this platform provides some percentage of discount on the special days or on the festival time. in 21st century there is some application name such as Amazon, Flipkart, Big basket, Zomato, Swingy, are popular application for the food delivery and also for online shopping.
if we see the positive side of the online shopping is that it is time saving, and sometimes you get the extra discount on the needed items because of the festival sale on the application. some application provides some free items with the delivered orders to attract the customers towards them, so their sale is increased.
conclusion: as it concludes that in the 21st century people get more choice in everything.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by agreeing that there is an abundance of choice in the modern era. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide examples of online shopping and food delivery services, the essay focuses heavily on the 'how' of modern shopping rather than exploring the broader implications of 'too many choices' (such as decision fatigue or the psychological impact). The position is clear, but the argument lacks depth and critical analysis. To improve, ensure you move beyond listing examples and instead explain the consequences of these choices to fully develop your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the structure is quite basic. The use of cohesive devices is often repetitive or mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'and also' or 'in 21st century'. The transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and the conclusion is abrupt. The conclusion is particularly weak, as it is labelled as 'conclusion:' rather than being integrated into the flow of the text. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on simple, repetitive phrasing such as 'online shopping applications' and 'available'. There are also several spelling errors and word-choice issues, such as 'excess' instead of 'access' and 'verry'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of errors in word formation limit the score. Try to incorporate more topic-specific collocations and avoid repeating the same basic terms throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement ('the delivery arrived' instead of 'arrives'), article usage ('in the 21st century' vs 'in 21st century'), and punctuation. Sentence boundaries are sometimes unclear, leading to run-on sentences. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and refining your use of articles and verb tenses will significantly improve your writing.
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