Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, because of technological advancement and industrial development production of various product increases in different size, color, design etc. Therefore, some people believe we have too many choices in terms of various product. In my view, I agree to this statement for a larger extent as it true that compares to past people often have many choices. The essay will anticipate all the facts and arguments.

In this paragraph, I will provide explanation for my agreement on the statement. Firstly, increased in competition among the business entity production increases of different size, color and design and quality improves so, people often get confused to choose the products from the wide ranges of different company which provides affordable price. For example, people often get confused for the selection of clothes , especially women as they are given variety of options too choose by attractive schemes and clothes.

Furthermore, in the past people only had to brought things from the nearby places which were limited in number of options but now because of the advancement of the technology people can buy from the online website such as amazon, Flipkart, Myntra from any corner of the world also it provide too many options which are not available in local areas.

Conversely, people do not have many options to choose in terms of educational courses and university. As there are limited and common course available for students to select also universities.

To conclude, technological innovation with the expansion of industries are the major factor on providing different attractive choices to people for selection and often get them confused. On the other hand, there are some area in which people do not get different choices to choose.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the first body paragraph provides a relevant example regarding consumer goods, the second body paragraph is slightly repetitive in its focus on online shopping. The counter-argument regarding education is introduced but lacks sufficient depth or specific examples to fully support the argument. To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your points with more detailed reasoning or illustrative examples, ensuring that the counter-argument is balanced effectively against your main position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'Conversely' to link your points. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph could be smoother. Additionally, some sentences are slightly disjointed due to punctuation errors, which affects the flow. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words will help create a more cohesive and professional structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'technological advancement' and 'industrial development'. However, there are instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'production of various product increases in different size' and 'brought things'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and there is a tendency to repeat basic words. To improve, focus on learning more precise collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition and enhance the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'production... increases'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'had to brought'), and missing articles or pluralization errors (e.g., 'different size', 'various product'). While the meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with verb tenses and noun-number agreement, to ensure your complex sentences are constructed correctly.

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