Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

that having many choices problem.i agree with this opinion because many choice usefull , they also make many people confused.

firstly,many choices make life.people choose products,job,addition in courses for example, buying a mobile phone, some people compare different brands and price and select the one best for them this can help people and save money and buying best product.

secondly, too many choise make sometime stress and confusing.many people spend lot of time and comparing different option for example, people are buying products an online shopping website,as a result, they feel worried about making the wrong decision.

in conclusion, i believe that having many choices is good things, but too many options sometime make confusion

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 115 words. This significantly limits the development of ideas. While the student attempts to address the prompt by discussing both the benefits and drawbacks of having many choices, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient detail or relevant examples. The position is stated, but the lack of length prevents a full exploration of the topic, resulting in a response that is only partially developed. To improve, the student must expand on their points with more specific examples and detailed explanations to meet the required length and depth.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into basic paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'firstly' and 'secondly'. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words or referencing to connect ideas smoothly. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed due to the brevity of the response. To improve, the student should focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices, such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'on the other hand', to create a more natural flow between sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. Words like 'many', 'good', and 'confusing' are used frequently. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'addition in courses' and 'make sometime stress'. The range is insufficient to demonstrate a higher level of language proficiency. To improve, the student should aim to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'overwhelming', 'decision-making process', or 'consumer autonomy', and pay closer attention to correct word forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('buying best product'), incorrect verb forms ('many choice usefull'), and punctuation issues (lack of spaces after periods). Complex sentence structures are largely absent or attempted with errors. These errors, while not always preventing communication, are frequent and noticeable throughout the text. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Practising the formation of complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions would also be beneficial.

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