Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. I do agree with the statement. Thus, this will be discussed in this essay.
In today's era, There are variety of options are available in all things such as product, job, transportation and so on. The scientist currently researching for other alternative product which can be useful if the main thing is missing. Additionally, it implies in jobs also. There are huge number of organization, companies and trust where we can work according to our personal perference. For example, my sister is a software engineer and she didn't find her job in her field, so she shifted her role after 1 week she got hired by the same company where she was rejected before.
However, there are some products are also available in market which is providing same performance of the original thing. Most of the residents from my country, India often preferable cheap goods rather than owning real ones. Moreover they also includes the warrenty,replacement and reparing option. That's the primary reason to choose affordable products over geniune ones. So, many residents get their things with having too many choices. For example,I was suffering from fever, doctor prescribed to take paracetamol but unfortunately the shop didn't have that tablet. Eventually, shopkeeper gave me vicks action 500 which is the alternative medicine for fever. After taking that medicine i was cure after that day.
In conclusion, All the people do have a number of choices either is it a medicine, vehicle, lifepartner or a career. There is a huge number of opportunities where we can select which one is best for us according to our preference.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses the prompt by expressing a clear agreement with the statement. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you provide examples, such as the sister's job search and the medicine anecdote, the link between these examples and the core argument—that having 'too many' choices is a negative or overwhelming phenomenon—is not fully explored. The essay focuses more on the existence of choices rather than the implications of having an excess of them. To improve, ensure that your arguments directly address the 'too many' aspect, perhaps by discussing decision fatigue or the difficulty of selection.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Thus, this will be discussed in this essay' or 'Additionally, it implies in jobs also.' Some transitions between sentences are abrupt, making the flow feel disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between the sister's job search and the broader topic of 'too many choices' is not explicitly linked through cohesive language. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would enhance the logical progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'perference' (preference), 'reparing' (repairing), and 'geniune' (genuine). The use of 'things' is quite repetitive and vague. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'software engineer' and 'paracetamol,' the overall lexical control is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated synonyms and ensuring correct spelling and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'There are variety of options are available,' 'there are some products are also available,' and 'I was cure after that day.' The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that each sentence has one clear subject and verb, and proofread carefully to eliminate basic errors in tense and pluralisation.
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