Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
INTRODUCTION:
Nowadays many peoples believe that we have many options. Yes, I agree with this statement. Nowadays, we live in an age of technology.Everything is quite advanced and peoples have many opportunities and many choises.
BODY PARAGRAPH 1:
Technology plays very important role in a day today life and the use of technology is now quite neccessary and it help us to solve our problems and also we use technology to save our time.
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.It is correct statement we have many choises now we have the avalibility of internet and we can do many things and we can earn money in easy way.
BODY PARAGRAPH 2:
we have to many choices to search new things, explore new things, finding the solution of a problem we have our internet we can search anything about whole universe.
we also have a choise to select our career for example many student have a dream to select in pakistan army, many students have a dream to become a engineer, so there are many choises of student to select a field in which they have interest.
CONCLUSION:
Our country is one of the most well growing country in which every facilities are been provided. In which students have many facilities to select there career. and one problem that we are facing that in pakistan there is a issue of jobs but there is the time of technology if we search in internet there are many ways to earn money online.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, but the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that technology provides choices, the arguments remain repetitive and lack depth. For example, you mention 'earning money' and 'career choices' in multiple places without fully exploring the implications of having 'too many' choices, such as the potential for decision fatigue or anxiety. To improve, ensure each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point rather than restating the same general ideas about the internet and technology. The conclusion introduces new information about job issues in Pakistan, which is slightly tangential to the core prompt regarding the abundance of choice.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the overall structure. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices (linking words) to connect sentences and ideas logically. For instance, sentences like 'It is correct statement we have many choises now' lack a transition from the previous thought. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between the introduction, body, and conclusion is mechanical. To achieve a higher band, use a wider variety of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'on the other hand' to guide the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words like 'many', 'choices', and 'technology'. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'peoples' (people), 'choises' (choices), 'neccessary' (necessary), and 'avalibility' (availability). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and attempt to use a more varied range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely, rather than repeating the same simple adjectives and nouns throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies primarily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'every facilities are been provided'), missing articles, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'become a engineer'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. To improve, practice using complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or conditional sentences, and pay closer attention to pluralization and article usage.
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