Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in present time many humans think we have too much choices and other sides some not believes from my point of view I am completely agree that nowadays many choices and I explain it and with example . First of all, to commence with nowadays we connect people from all over the world and chat many people in past time we not chat and connect people from all over the world and not connect many people from long period of time otherwise we send money from one place to another place important document and many other things but in past time we not send information easy .for example in present time we travel from one country to another country and one place to another place in few hours such as car bus and train and but in past time we did not travel many country in few hours . and second reason furthermore, nowadays we get a good treatment for our health and we drink pure and clean water and most important thing we get good education and built our future more peaceful and advance to explicate it in past time we not get good treatment when we ill and some child also died at on birth and people recovered many months other hand in present time when human ill theyb get a good treatment from doctor and recovered only few days and child birth increased due to advance level and nowadays wed have many choice . in conclusion, today we get many choice such as send information and travel from one city to another county and get a good treatment from doctor when we ill so that is the main reason I am completely agree with this statement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, but the development of ideas is weak. While you mention 'choices' in the conclusion, the body paragraphs focus almost entirely on technological and medical advancements rather than the specific issue of having 'too many choices'. The arguments are tangential, as they describe general progress rather than the psychological or practical implications of an abundance of options. To improve, you must directly link your examples to the concept of choice, such as the difficulty of decision-making or the benefits of consumer variety. The response is currently too focused on general development rather than the specific prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic paragraphing, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and run-on sentences. While some cohesive devices like 'First of all' and 'in conclusion' are used, they are often followed by disjointed ideas. The referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. The lack of clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph means the reader has to guess the purpose of the paragraph. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has one clear, central idea would significantly improve the flow and structure of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic words like 'good', 'many', and 'things'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'human ill' instead of 'when humans are ill' and 'child birth increased' instead of 'infant mortality decreased'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the errors in word formation and collocation occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to modern society, consumerism, and decision-making, and practice using these words in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'I am completely agree' should be 'I completely agree', and 'we not chat' should be 'we did not chat'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often fragmented or run-on. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many missing commas and incorrect capitalization. These errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring that verbs are correctly conjugated will help improve your accuracy.

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