Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In modern time number of individuals think that we have to create many choices due to government provide many oppporchunity and they provide goods at discounted prices therefore many humans increase to your choices. I completely agree with this given statement.
People are totally different think compare to past in decade ago they were not increase their choices why because at that time people were to do hard work but not increase enough salaries so they not complet your one think so they were not rice more choices. But now a days time are totally different people are to do hard work so companey provide enough salaries and human are achive your dream and choices. As, result there are more benefits in current world.
Decade year ago people were not long time study in their child because not enough money but nowaday govrnment provide school and collage with discounted prices.
In conclusion so many benefits nowday and current is better compare to past I am thinking that future will more better compare to current.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 174 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments remain superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. While the student takes a clear position, the discussion is repetitive and lacks the depth required for an academic essay. The points regarding government support and salaries are mentioned but not fully explored or linked effectively to the prompt about the 'abundance of choices'. Due to the severe under-length and lack of development, the response is limited in its ability to address the task fully.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'therefore' and 'but'. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, and the lack of clear topic sentences makes it difficult to follow the writer's argument. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the overall structure feels mechanical rather than fluid. The conclusion is brief and does not effectively summarize the main points or provide a final thought that synthesizes the preceding arguments.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'oppporchunity', 'companey', and 'rice' (likely meant 'reach'). The student relies on basic, high-frequency words, and there is no attempt to use more sophisticated or academic vocabulary. The phrasing is often unnatural, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning collocations and expanding their range of topic-specific vocabulary related to socio-economic changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and word order (e.g., 'people were to do hard work'). Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing articles throughout the text. Complex structures are largely absent or attempted with significant errors that distort the meaning. The high frequency of basic grammatical mistakes makes the text difficult to read and significantly lowers the overall quality of the writing.
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