Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The answer is complex since there are a lot of choices in our life and all of them are different kinds. In some cases I wouid say that it is a good thing to have the ability to choose from a wide variety. Take for example gastronomy. Every single person has different meals on their list of favourites. Actually if you have a bigger family it is almost impossible to cook something that everyone would like. Therefore I would say that it is great that you can go to a shopping center and choose from a dozen different food types. I can always find something that looks delicious.
Naturally, there are some people who say that it is against evolution. They claim to say that back in the old days we had a perfect life when technically everybody was farming. I personally disagree with that. I am happy that I could choose a job that fits best to my abilities. I mean no one is the same, why would we want to do the same? Different kinds of universities give us the opportunity to beome who we are meant to be. We have the right to choose.
However there is one topic where, according to my opinion, we have too many choices. This specific area is television. There are hundreds of channels, therefore you can always find something that is worth watching. Literally you could sit in your sofa the whole day and watch films. I think that people doing leas outdoor activities are the results of the many available channels. From this point of view I would agree that we have too many choices.
In conclusion, I would say that we can't generaily talk about choices since they could be different. In some cases it is good to have many of them while in other areas they could have a negative effect.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the pros and cons of having many choices. You maintain a clear position throughout, acknowledging the benefits of variety in areas like food and career, while critiquing the excess of choice in media. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding television and 'less outdoor activities' is a good point but lacks depth or specific evidence to fully support the claim. To reach a higher band, ensure that each body paragraph provides a more thorough explanation or a more concrete example to justify your stance, rather than moving quickly between points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Therefore', 'However', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. For instance, the jump from discussing family meals to shopping centers is a bit sudden. Additionally, the use of referencing could be improved to ensure smoother progression between sentences. Overall, the structure is coherent, but the use of cohesive devices needs to be more flexible and natural to achieve a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your meaning clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'gastronomy' and 'evolution', which is positive. However, there is a reliance on basic vocabulary and some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'technically everybody was farming' or 'generaily' (spelling error). To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and less common academic vocabulary. Avoid repetitive phrasing like 'different kinds' or 'some people who say', and aim for more sophisticated synonyms to demonstrate a wider range of lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'I wouid say', 'beome', and 'sit in your sofa' (should be 'on'). There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not impede communication, they are persistent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on proofreading for small errors in verb forms and prepositions, and try to vary your sentence structure further by using more complex subordinating clauses.
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