Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, individuals believe that we have so many opportunities.I agree, nowadays lakh of opportunities people have like content creation and businesses.
On the one hand so many people are doing and express they talent and self confidence on internet. Bue to become a public figure and earn money .for example people make reels and content creation videos, their daily vlogs and development their talent to shown .To upload their YouTube channel and Instagram and they get likes and followers and they are to be famous.And also they earn money to collaboration through.
On the other hand people do multiple business opportunities their have to start . Because of people are uncomfortable to work someone else and frustrated to work they don't like ,so people choice there own part to earn money and develop there skills.For example start food business earn money and gain almost of skills and experience they talent to do cooking and express they talent.
They are some less opportunities to have the uneducated people like there are not studied and development they care parts are success.Bue to fears and less confident throughout self.for insurances, people strack in one job They don't like or they don't change the fear of there knowledge and people not recognition what they want .Their go with the flow and don't do any thing to achieve.
In conclusion,I agree people have so many opportunities to choice like content creation and businesses to become a successful person.Some people are fear and low self confidence to choice opportunities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position, but the development of ideas is limited. While you mention content creation and business as examples of modern opportunities, the arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The third paragraph attempts to discuss the lack of opportunities for uneducated individuals, which is a relevant counter-point, but the expression is unclear, making it difficult to follow your logic. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea with specific, coherent examples. The conclusion is brief and simply restates the introduction rather than synthesizing the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the frequent misuse of 'Bue to' (likely meant 'Due to') and 'For insurances' (likely meant 'For instance'). The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the transition between the lack of education and the fear of change is not clearly linked. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning. Using a wider variety of linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'nevertheless' would help improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'opportunities', 'money', and 'talent'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'lakh of opportunities' (which is not standard English) and 'care parts' (likely meant 'career paths'). Spelling errors are frequent, such as 'Bue', 'strack', and 'there' used instead of 'their'. These errors occasionally impede communication, forcing the reader to guess the intended meaning. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations and using more precise vocabulary related to the topic of career development and modern lifestyle choices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are frequently marred by grammatical errors, such as 'Because of people are uncomfortable' and 'They are some less opportunities'. Subject-verb agreement and word order issues are common throughout the text. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect comma usage. The frequency of these errors is high enough to cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verb tenses and subject-verb agreements are consistent before attempting more complex structures.
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