Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Few think that nowadays we have too many choices. I predominantly agree with this view and the primary purpose of this monograph is to illustrate my position with relevant examples.
Beginning with the main argument, I strongly believe we have too many choices like in career and life other fields also. Due to this availablility of choices people can do what they want to do and what they want to achieve in their lives, it results in positive outcomes in our lives. To exemplify, my sister had too many choices available after her 12th and because of that choices she is doing IT and also pursing her passion. Another important justification is going mall and buying things of our choice is best thing according to me. As it benefits in our normal day to day lives, it leads to easy selection of our choice and clarity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 146 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position clearly, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth required for an academic essay. The examples provided, such as the mention of your sister or shopping at a mall, are too brief and do not sufficiently support the complex topic of whether having too many choices is beneficial or overwhelming. To improve, you must expand your points with more detailed explanations and logical reasoning to meet the length requirement and fully address the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into two short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is limited due to the brevity of the text. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Beginning with the main argument' and 'Another important justification', which helps the flow. However, the connection between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the lack of a clear conclusion or a more structured body paragraph makes the overall coherence feel incomplete. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting evidence and a concluding thought, using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. You use some repetitive phrasing, such as 'choices' and 'lives'. There are also some awkward word choices, such as using 'monograph' to describe an IELTS essay, which is stylistically inappropriate. The vocabulary is functional but does not demonstrate the flexibility or the use of less common lexical items required for a higher band score. Focus on incorporating more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition and improve the sophistication of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'Few think that nowadays we have too many choices' is an awkward opening, and 'like in career and life other fields also' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'going mall'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the clarity of your message. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring your sentence structures are grammatically sound.
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