Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent years, it has become increasingly common to see that some people have an opinion that people today have vast number of choices. To a large extent I strongly agree that we have too many options to choose. This essay will explain why i hold this view.
To begin with one major reason is that Increasing number of social media platforms and websites on the internet. This means that in this age and time there are lots of social media platforms and attractive websites who promote products , people see products online and purchase it from online stores. For example, Instagram and pinterest are in trend in youth generation, individuals go on it and search what they want and it show lists of choices for one search, such as if someone search t-shirt, there are many images and link of online stores to purchase it popped up.
Another important reason is that Globalization provides people well paid job in international and multinational-corporation companies, so individual can make more money and think about more options. In other words, world connectivity give chance to workers to meet people internationally and work with them or make a business with them, which helps people to learn about global market and this knowledge is beneficial for salary growth and individuals create fortune and think about better choices in their life. For instance, Indian people who work hard and go for study abroad or for job to create good wealth, and they do a job in international or mnc's to generate good income so they can have plenty of options open.
In conclusion, To a large extent i firmly agree that nowadays we have plenty of choices because of increasing trend of social media and online stores and due to worldwide integration people be paid and because of money numerous choices open for them.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The first body paragraph focuses on the abundance of consumer choices via social media, which is relevant. The second paragraph attempts to link globalization and income to having more choices, but the connection is less direct and slightly tangential. To improve, you should ensure that every point explicitly supports the argument that we have 'too many' choices, rather than just discussing the existence of choices or the benefits of wealth. The conclusion effectively summarizes your stance, but the overall depth of analysis could be increased to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To begin with', 'Another important reason', and 'In conclusion', which help guide the reader. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed. For example, the transition between discussing globalization and the specific example of Indian workers is abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'multinational-corporation', 'globalization', and 'worldwide integration'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'in trend in youth generation' (should be 'trending among the younger generation') and 'create fortune' (should be 'amass a fortune'). Additionally, some phrasing is repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'choices' and 'options'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and idiomatic expressions, and pay closer attention to natural word combinations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the youth generation'), subject-verb agreement ('websites who promote' should be 'websites that promote'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. For instance, the sentence 'To begin with one major reason is that Increasing number of...' is grammatically flawed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like article usage and verb tense consistency.
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