Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent years, there has been considerable discussion about whether too many choices. Many individual support this idea, whereas others hold the opposite opinion. From my perspective, I completely agree with this view, as it can updating self and also following trend. This essay will explain the reasons for my position.
To begin with, the main reason people are now updating their self day by day. In practical terms, lots of individual are not same at how the future cause they are knowing about their updating.
Furthermore, following trend provides another strong reason for supporting this viewpoint. This can be explained by the fact that people are follow the celebraties trend . As a consequence, person may benefit in financial improvement from earning doing blog.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 125 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position, the arguments provided are underdeveloped and lack sufficient explanation or relevant examples. The points regarding 'updating self' and 'following trends' are vague and do not clearly link back to the prompt about having 'too many choices'. To improve, you must expand each body paragraph with concrete examples and logical reasoning to fully address the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the progression of ideas is weak because the arguments are not fully explained. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with' and 'Furthermore', but they are not enough to compensate for the lack of depth in the content. The connection between sentences is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. You should focus on linking your ideas more logically and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'updating self' and 'following trend' are used incorrectly or lack the necessary precision for an academic essay. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'earning doing blog', which is unnatural. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more accurate collocations. Focus on learning how to use words in their correct context rather than relying on simple, repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede communication. Examples include 'Many individual support' (should be 'individuals'), 'people are now updating their self' (should be 'themselves'), and 'people are follow the celebraties trend' (should be 'follow celebrity trends'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. To improve, you need to focus on subject-verb agreement, correct pluralization, and the proper use of verb tenses. Practicing more complex sentence structures will also help improve your score.
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