Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, As the technological advancement take rapid growth along the time. So it will affect the people's prespectives and also their choices by giving them huge varieties . As far as my opinion is considered, i strongly agree to the statement which we delve in upcoming essay .
Firstly, it is undeniable that the world is changing very fast because digitalization is done on very large scale and people get more and more attracted towards these changes and some of them can't able to handle it. For an instance, our elder parents are never seen these type of thing so they feel complications in using them. Moreover, nowadays there are lots of application and platforms which help us to provide us lots of things with different choices and similar things also. For an example, the apps like amazon and flipkart provides 1000s of items of different categories and companies. Therefore, we have lots of things with various choices.
Secondly, as the marketing strategies also changing time to time and easily available on different places and platform such as instagram and facebook which influence people on huge scale. Sometimes these type of advertisement confuse public between two products and as a result people choose wrong one. Furthermore, these choices also affect the child's future negatively because parents have lots of school and collages which sometimes fools the parents by fake advertisement.
In conclusion, there are lots of choices it is undeniable but we have to choose it with some responsibility and accountability.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of the statement. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention digital advancement and marketing strategies, the arguments lack depth and specific analysis. For instance, the example of 'elder parents' is relevant but not fully connected to the core argument about the consequences of having too many choices. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, ensure each paragraph explores the 'why' and 'how' behind your claims rather than just listing examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of your argument. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the flow within sentences is sometimes hindered by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'As far as my opinion is considered, i strongly agree to the statement which we delve in upcoming essay'. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, and some transitions feel mechanical. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother sentence-to-sentence transitions would enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your main points. You use some topic-specific terms like 'digitalization', 'marketing strategies', and 'advertisement'. However, there is a reliance on repetitive and simple language, such as 'lots of things' and 'different things'. There are also instances of incorrect word choice or collocation, such as 'technological advancement take rapid growth' and 'influence people on huge scale'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations to express your ideas with greater sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but the essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'technological advancement take'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'are never seen these type of thing'), and punctuation errors. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper structure, such as 'Nowadays, As the technological advancement take rapid growth along the time.' You need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions to improve your accuracy.
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